SHADOWSLASH
This is hard to read. The story itself has potential, but the grammar, spelling, and overall continuity of the story needs work. Id recommend getting someone to help edit your chapters or spending more time editing them yourself. Editing your work is how you improve as a writer, so i encourage you to do so. Till then sorry but dropped.
This is one of, if not, the worst thing I have ever read. First off, the MCs name. I know it seems like I'm nitpicking, but really? His actual name is Shadowslash? That is literally the first name that pops into my mind when i think ****ty Sonic the Hedgehog OC. Secondly, the total lack of grammatical anything. If you came here expecting a story with basic things such as punctuation, well sorry to say but you're **** outta luck. Misspellings are also very common. Thirdly, the plot. It's a very generic isekai monster reincarnation. On top of being very generic it's also very forced. Things happen because the plot needs to progress, so don't expect fantastical things such as common sense or logic. Finally, the style. It's dead and dry. Things happen so quickly you could blink and miss it (e.g., he went to the forest to hunt and then he came back). The dialogue (and monologue) is emotionless (e.g., "I found this piece of monster meat but I didn't kill it" "Ok"). Also, you should never use abbreviations such as OMG in a novel as it breaks the flow of story and just plainly looks wierd.
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Im sorry if I sound like a bad guy but this story needs some serious work on its grammar and also story, like it says it passes a whole week instantly Without giving much clue as too what happened. It instantly transfers to him adventuring without giving much explanation. Basically the story loses its interest very quickly due to how its written and doesnt sound well thought out.
imagine watching Pokemon, only the Mc trainer is reincarnated as a pokemon monster so he can level up too. Now he fills his pokedex with all kinds of monsters as he expands his family of monsters, learning about each other's backstories and using strategy to help them all level up. Just like the game there's chapters full of grinding with tons of details for each battle. Occasionally the plot is sprinkled in as the world begins spiraling stronger. If you love the chapters filled with stats updates this is for you. In the chapters before 100 there are double chapters marked as .5 that are fully dedicated to showing everyone's current status. I'm afraid I started skipping those and some longer battles too. The concepts for the story are solid and fun.... each and every battle is extremely detailed, and you can easily track the Mc and all his underlings slowly getting more powerful. It is possible too have a bit too much detail.