ShigarakiMitsuki
When I reached to the 5 th chapter, I feel so happy for trying this out. Your book title got my attention specially. Actually this is unexpectable. Because every novel the lead is taken by the boy. So here when I saw your title immediately started to read because I was excited for somwthing new. When I was reading, I found out that you have a good mind for explane in a certain way. Just love that. Okay author, not gonna make this long. Allover, this is good. Love it. keep it up.. Rooting for you 👍👍👍👍👍🤗🤗🤗🤗❤️
Nice work. I read the initial chapters and I'm surely gonna read them all. The plot, the backstory and the characters are all well-built. Personally, I am a fan of revenge stories. And your story is kinda realistic. It doesn't matter who plays with others' feelings first. But, what should people do when they get betrayed. Revenge is the first thing that comes to mind. And you know what. When your first scar is your first love, then it doesn't matter how many came after that, because you'll never gonna love them anyways.
First chapter in, you know this is going to be a teen story with a R18 concept. Not one to judge and I know this is a work of fiction but I'm surprised to learn they started being intimate quite early on. It's very much a "ruin all girls because a girl ruined my life" concept and honestly it is not my cup of tea since I'm a girl (lol). But that should not be an issue since your book is already set in the right audience. Writing wise I think it's not bad for someone young. Of course there's also room for improvement. Personally, I think you should proofread them so there would not be any confusion with the readers. All the best!
Not somebody who’s really into romance really but I still found this one entertaining, mainly at the mcs complete incel behavior having some of the dumbest (in a good way) and comedic narration I’ve read lately; I probably won’t read further cause romance isn’t really my thing but the work itself is decent in my opinion.