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The story was quite good, at least up to the point where romance was introduced. Well, let's go to some strong and weak points of the story shall we? Pros: World Building; the world building aspect is quite unique, and it's seen through the eyes of the protagonist, though of course because of this the development of world building would be quite slow and the world isn't exactly fully explained but it gives off a sense of mystery which I quite like but it may not be for everyone. Oh also the story's take on the system is great. 4.6/5 Writing Quality; the paragraphs are very readable, the uses of words is alright, and there are only few grammatical errors. 4.2/5 Updates; This is self explainable, it updates every other day. 4.4/5 Now onto why this story got such a bad score; the Cons: Story Development; now mind you, I was going to originally give this a 4.6 or even 4.7 but then the romance part happen. The pacing is just right and it isn't rushed and slow in any way, there are few plot holes. The problem here is the romance, it's too rushed and by that I mean way too rushed. Sure it's tagged yuri and it'll come eventually but at least you should do so naturally. The romance seems forced, and as of now it doesn't at all fit. 3/5 Characters; Oh boy, do I have a lot to say about this one. Let's first go over the protagonist, a cold, somewhat calculating, and at first extremely revenge driven person. But then Chapter 43 happens and most of her personality is thrown out of the window, You don't just go from potential enemy to pawn and then straight up to lovers. That's not how relationships work, nor how a human mind work either. She's written to have trust issues and seem manipulating, so why just suddenly drop it all instead of developing everything instead? As for the other side characters we have seen way too little of them for me to properly rate the others but for now. 1.8/5 Overall the story is quite good, though weighted down by the sudden massive break of character and romance. Total score: 3.6/5
What words to describe how much of a masterpiece this is... I want to write a decently long detailed review but I feel lazy so... uhh... I'll just point out random things I guess. First things first... YURI!!! I have a serious addiction to yuri, everything I read is good but when there's no yuri it just feels so... lacklustre? Like, everytime I read some romcom novel where It's F x M, I feel like, sure, IT IS great, but like, I feel like it doesn't make me as happy and excited as yuri could. The writing is, what can I say, It's higher than the word highest. Although there were a few misplelled words, there was nothing wrong with the grammar. The characters are also just fantastic! I mean, white haired female MCs are just the best and nothing could change my mind about it. The personality is, uhh, a bit...confusing? Well, sometimes. I just felt like her personality changes WAY TOO MUCH and TOO FAST. It's probably because of my reading speed and the story's time skips, my excitement is also a variable since the more excited I am the more I would want even more of this novel. Like, if I read every chapter and there was no more chapters to read, I'll probably be in agony saying how "I'M DYING FROM BOREDOM! I NEED MORE CHAPTERS!" But, well, I also know authors are human not some restless robots and so I just try to convince myself that there will, hopefully, another chapter fast. I feel like I have more to say but I think this is enough. All I can really say right now is that this is worth reading and you'll regret it if you don't read this. So why not give it a try?! If you like it after reading, why not support by stones, rewiew or gifts to motivate author to continue doing a great job!
Very easy read. No glaring mistakes. My only complaint would be about the character since she feels way too nonchalant about everything. Sure, she gets sick and disgusted, but the writing of the story prevents that emotions from getting to the reader. I do like the world and system. The plot seems fine too.