VKSS1602
It is really a good Book but i dropped it very fast at chapter 70 because the MC always had smth witch made him unique but in chapter 70 he wasn't anymore and this dissapointed me a lot . It is like a Person reincarnateds with a system but every person he wants to gets the same system and same Powers it just doen't make the MC Unique....more simpe and normal and that is what i can't accept. The Story and grammar and everything is really good but i can't accept it. But for every other person on here pls go read this and enjoy because it is really good. I would even think about donating smth to this story because i really like it but ......Chapter 70 destroyed all my Fun. And the worst part it that if i love a story like this is that i always imagine to be the MC so when he is happy i am kindy happy too and when he is say i am as well. But when in CH 70 he got in my eyes " Normal" and that totally destroyed my mood for the day ;( If he gave them the talent to reach the power of Light and Darkness ....OKAY But he should always be stronger or it isn't interesting anymore or not for me. Imagine Ultimate scheming system where all his wives always have the same Cultivation like him Blank. That's the same here. Before he was destined to be the TOP ALONE but not not. It is like you are born the be the Emperor but then they say there have to be 10 Emperors with the same Power ????? Blank right OK srry got off the point a bit. What i want to say for me it got off the path and it isn't smth i get myself to read but it is really a highty quality Novel and i think you should read it if you don't mind what i wrote before . **: Author don't take it personally because i think you are doing great ;)
Everything is good and I enjoyed every turn of the story... The only thing that is bothering me is..... although this would make me look bad, and also needy, and a (little bit?) Perfectionist.... correct me if I'm wrong but isn't the right spelling for "Devine" actually "Divine"..... Really I don't mean to be offensive or perfectionistic, I just thought you should edit it since its always been being mentioned every time you talks about cores.... But all in all... I really enjoys the story... keep it up and please don't drop it....
Pretty nice story progress. Loving the limitless potential and the various wonders in the world. Like the "cultivation" system as well. ......................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
Awesome story and i'm really looking forward to how it developes. Just a few things that i think would make it a better experience if fixed. 1- there are too many question marks in places they shouldnt be. A character would be making a statement and then there would be a question mark at the end, which isnt a big issue but can be irritating at times. 2- there are too many fully capatilised words or sentences. I know that its for emphasising a point but its a little much. Also all the "everyone shouted "WHHAATTT" " gets old. It just doesnt make sense and makes me feel like im watching a cartoon. 2- generally the spelling isnt that bad but there are a few words that are mispelled regularly for example the word "read" is always spelled as "red". Its ok if its once or twice but this has been the same since the start of the novel untill the current chapter im up to (100s). For spelling and grammar there are many free programs like grammarly that can help you. Anyway sorry if it seemed like a rant but im just trying to help you out and make the novel a better experience. Great job on the story and best of luck
Interesting concept so far, I've read up till chapter 34 so what is to be said going forward is only relevant up till those chapters. Recommendations to the author: 1. Get someone to edit your chapters, doesn't have to be a professional editor. In fact, you could also pass it through an application that checks that type of thing automatically. Some misspelled words that are fundamental to the stories development and world background, such as Devine (Divine). As well as some normal misspelling, like: rediculous instead of ridiculous and their when it should be there. Anyways, those are some ****** examples. 2. Fix some verb tenses to match with the correct english grammar to make the story flow better. 3. Would recommend an overhaul on your sentence structures to make them "smoother". Example, instead of "It was summer. The sun was hot and bright. In the Wissian town there was a colosseum. In the colosseum a fight is happenning between the two magicians. The crowd is cheering for their respective supporting fighters" It was summer and the sun was shining strongly upon the colosseum located in the town of Wissian; where two magicians where currently dueling making the crowd go wild, while cheering for their favored fighter. Excuse my grammar mistakes, even though I am criticizing I am not necessarily a good writer. I think that if you made those corrections your story would be so much better. Nevertheless, it's a very interesting story which I will continue to read since it has got interesting concepts and . So kudos to the author.