Reviews of The journey of a lifetime

I am the creater of this novel but i think i still need to tweek it in some areas. Overall, I'd say it's a good start. If anyone has any suggestions of how my story will flow, I will respect each and every answer. Enjoy the chapters of my comic'the journey of a lifetime'.

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I think my story is going great so far.The whole idea of it was based off of my own dreams. I have always wanted to be a fashion designer, I still do but I need to work for it. In the mean time I write novels or chapters for the novel. I hope everyone enjoys it!