This is what I think I deserve after all of my soul I have poured in to this. I rewrote 80k words and what you see now is the rewritten version. I can't say for sure that now this book is the best you have ever read but its the best I have ever written among all of my other works :D If you have qns, criticism, praises, or anything else just reply to this XD
Today I'm tired so I wont leave as detailed a review as I normally do. The main problem with this book is that it is painful to read. It is not emotionally painful to read, and not badly written painful to read. It is 'why the hëll did THIS happen?' painful to read. Like I said, I'm tired, don't wanna explain much, so I'll give just one example. MC is born again in a disgüstingly mütilated body. Fine. Young master is törturing her. Okay. Wants her to get räped. Fine. Lacky comes in, thinks she's too disgüsting. Okay. Young master gets distracted. MC tries to escape. The 'loyal' servant of the MC UNEXPECTEDLY shouts when he sees she's escaping, alerting the young master. He'd been watching leisurely btw. And he's loyal, according to the story. I kid you not. All of this is okay. Then there's the system. I don't like how it works. At all. Why 5 stars? Because it's yuri. And the story can improve as it goes on. I'll probably come back to read it once it has more chapters.
I suddenly realised that I had yet to review this book. So… here goes nothing. Short review: It’s a really good read. The stats speak for themselves. Long review: Writing quality: Not the best there is. Honestly, it can even be quite confusing at first. But the rate at which the dear author improved is scary. The writing in the later chapters might even drag you into the world inside the book. That being said, it might not be the best in WN, but not that far from it. Update Stability: It’s as stable as stable could be. Expect at least one chapter everyday, or even some ‘accidental’ mass releases. Story development: It’s not the most unique of stories. But fret not. A story is not driven by its uniqueness. It’s driven by ‘questions’ and ‘answers’, at least to me. And the way dear author used these elements is fine enough to keep you intrigued, to turn those pages (or scroll that screen to be precise). Character design: Here again, the elements of ‘Questions’ and ‘Answers’ are used. The major characters have depth and an air of mystery. But keep reading, the air of mystery will subside but depth- will increase, slowly but surely. World background: It’s a typical Eastern fantasy setting. So those of you who are veterans (and I assume that most of you are) can easily get accustomed to the world. And finally… it’s YURIIIIIIII!!!! Give it a try and you won’t regret it. Thanks.
i gave this book an honest chance but please dont waste your time. i read until ch25 and came out more confused than i ever. also considering theres only positive comments left on this book, i dont see how the author is not deleting bad comments. i cant even give constructive criticism because i cant make sense of this story. i started with hating the MC and by ch25, i now hate the author. i honestly feel like i lost brain cells by reading this.
The story is really very interesting since the character will have to see them as a woman in addition to not knowing anything about cultivation, the way the events unfold makes you want to keep reading since it turns out to be entertaining. The personalities of the people of the cultivation world are very well represented; I like the interactions since they are fluid. Well I suppose that the protagonist will have to accept who he is XD. I would advise other readers to read this novel. PS: The way you narrate is fine. You are on the right track as a writer!
First I wanna say I'm not fan of fantasy n cultivator thing novels.. My one of friend recommend me this book and I tried.. 😍 And overall its pretty good. Author did her job well.. 👍 I really felt bad for MC, His love of life married another guy and same day he died and send to cultivation world and its as a woman. 🤩 So I can say this plot is really unique. Do u think he/she can survive in unfamiliar world??? 🤔 Yah m curious to know it.. I recommend everyone to try this novel to know it.. ❤️ Good luck author for WSA 🤞🍀
I just wrote a big review and it did not save, so I'm going to cry real hard, excuse me. From the little that I have read, this novel is quite ordinary in its premise but quite promising nonetheless. World background: from the little I've seen, Author-san shows us their world and society with actions more than with long descriptions, so that's pretty nice. Can't say much about story development yet, but what I can say is that my attention was properly hooked up and I can't wait to see more from it. Character Design: I think it's a bit early to review this topic since the characters were not truly flashed out yet. However, they do feel unique and discernable from one another and not a bunch of mindless puppets. Writing Quality: It always feels a bit hypocritical reviewing this topic on stories from non-native speakers, because I'm too learning the language. There're some small typos and weird sentences but they did not compromise my reading experience. What did stand out for me were some complex( in a good way) sentences that were well made contrasting with the weird ones, but that's natural, just a bit peculiar. THE BIGGEST TOPIC: I don't know how or why, but what I can see in this novel is a lot of care and love from Author-san on writing this. They wish to share the same happy feelings they feel when doing all this and I think that's quite a good mentality. Always answering questions and engaging with readers. Suggestions: It's easy to say ' get an editor' but's not easy to do it. So here is my small type that I hope can help you. When you write on the author's note the explanation of something you felt confusing, that's a sign to go back and try redoing it. Sometimes we write something so obvious on our heads that we do not make it explicit in the text. It's a hard process to imagine what others will think when reading your text but I think it does help. Keep the good work!
What a nice novel you've got. I have read it and I can only say that you've planned it well. The vocabulary of words was verily shown to the readers. The fact that he became a female was really gender-bending on my part. 😂 Like one of the most favourite anime I have watched. Do you know the slime? hehe. Anyways, you are currently a good author and how much more if you improved! That was something I look forward to. 😁
This novel is very good I actually quite liked this novel. but there is many problems in this novel. those are making mc as boy when he is talking with system,after his death he became girl its best he should call girl insted of boy and also his thought about going back to earth is unnecessary he knows he is dead in earth but he thinking of going back its make him stupid.