Mohitkumar
Hey you should make a discord server for your novels. Firstly, it only takes a click to make a server. Secondly, it's helpful to both you and your community. Let me elaborate. For the community, it serves as a spot to discuss about the novel, ask for spoilers, share fanarts and stuff. Moreover, for the readers who read the novel on a laptop/pc, they usually don't get their updates on their phones. This means that they don't get updated about when the chapters are released. But on discord, bots exist that automatically ping people(who want to be pinged) for updates when new chapters are released. For the author, the community gathered at a point where its easy to communicate serves many uses. You can get ideas for your novel from the tons of readers out there regarding anything if you're ever stuck on something. You can also get suggestions passively from the community. It's also easy to find people who'll be willing to proofread your novels on discord along with the fact that you can just get someone who's willing to fully setup your server. Basically there's no work for you here but only advantages. Think about it.
I Like this Novel!❤️ it has good Story Development, the characters ain't boring, and the world background is also quite interesting. the only problem I think is the spelling of some words and some grammatical error, I hope Author-san fix this because, not only it will improve the novel, it will also make reading enjoyable. All in all, I like this Novel❤️ UmU
The story is great. The problems are mainly the grammar, and the punctuation marks. I've noticed that you rarely use question marks and exclamation marks so it's uncomfortable to read. The comma's are also all over the place. Ah, also, the point of view keeps changing. One second it was at first person's POV, then it would switch to third person's POV. if you could fix this, then the story would be better. I really suggest that you find someone to proofread. That's all, thank youuu
If you are thinking it is a copy of The Author POV, then you are freaking wrong. It stimulates you as goog if not better than that. Man, go through 80 chapters if you think grammar is not good then it is on me that you will enjoy it. I heartily thank the author for such a good book. It is a great book.
The story development is veryy nice. I love it. I also love the characters and their interactions. Their dialogues. But I always got confused about the world background, because it's a mix of historical and modern. There are also many typos and missing words(?) at the beginning but it's improving so I'm fine with that. Recommended!
my best advice as of now is to get an an experienced editor. one of the many problems i would like to point out is that the grammar and formatting is messed up. spacings are placed in the wrong places, words are phrased strangely, dialogue is very strained, and characters act rigidly? there is a glaring lack of flow.