69 The journey to Zenith city VII

{I'm going to start working on my past tense and present tense sentence structures, only one person I know of has a problem. It is a good point though, I want this story make sense structure wise. I don't make to many of these mistakes, but they shouldn't happen at all. So please mark any of the past tense used in the wrong way for me, I know I cant get them all.}