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The flow of the story is good, so far, I'm only at the early chapters ><). The characters are well-written, and I kinda like Yuri so that's a plus point XD . There was, however, minimal errors that I would not point out since it doesn't affect the awesome narrative~ Good job~ In anyway, good luck on you work and more power!
Like the idea of a system itself trying to become imortal. Definitely a unique take on the system genre. Definitely need to see more too get a better feel on a story like this. The beginning is a very standard cultivation novel with solid writing. One thing I would warn the author about is the quick pace. I understand your trying to get into the story but take it slowly and make sure to set a strong foundation. For example, a reason for why the system wants to cultivate. This also falls into the category of understanding where you want to take the story. Otherwise, I look forward to what you do with this interesting idea!
This is a system novel done right. Really immersive and in-depth with the world building right from the start. Just like playing through an a new RPG video game. Snowy is an interesting protagonist, starting as quite a clean slate and slowly evolving over time through her experiences and interactions with her world. The prose is light and easy to digest with short and snappy paragraphs. I sense a long-running masterpiece to be brewing with this one. All readers take notice, this one is definitely a winner!