Okay, this takes a straight 5/5, without thinking twice. Considering this is the author’s first work…GOOD JOBBB👏👏👏, you did amazing, the explanations are clear and the story progresses smoothly. The tale Mr.Blythe told Eva ended in quite a peculiar way in the first chap, and it was quite unexpected for a six year time skip to happen. Basically took me unguarded. Again 5/5 and good job!
Welcome to my first novel >.< If anyone has any questions related to the book, feel free to ask me here ^^ I'm up for all types of feedback, no matter what kind it is or how kind it is, so go for it! Subduing The Devil Overlord is predicted to reach at least 800 chapters so it's gonna be a long run, do check out the synopsis for links on how you can talk to me privately. Enjoy reading ❤
Writing quality is great! I love how the first chapter began, introducing the characters and giving us little details about their personalities was a genius idea. I love the pace work and the story flows very well with your choice of words. What I noticed is your inability to describe with all five senses but that did not ruin your writing in anyway. It's like a standard fairytale with well thought of descriptions and engaging conversations. I also feel the conversations should be separated from the paragraphs not buried in them. It makes it a little hard to tell who's talking. But it's an awesome story, one I presume will have a blossoming fanbase in the future. Supposing it has about ≈300-700 chapters.
Interesting story! Feels just like a fairytale! Love the fantasy bit on the MC's design such as silver hair and stuff The writing is pretty detailed, it made me feel like I was watching a movie. Great job! Although it could use some alterations like different choices of words here and there to match the setting of the story but overall it's still great! Keep up the good work, fellow author! 💪💖
If the book was a person I'd say they're absolutely stunning!! The way the characters interact and different scenes unfolds just makes me so excited and want to read for more! I say great work author and definitely hoping for the best both for you and to your book from the bottom of my heart! Goodluck ♡
The way the author tells the story is quite immersive. I felt that I was watching a movie because of how smooth the flow is. The world where mythical creatures exist was already intriguing. I can feel that the author invested in this book. I'm looking forward to Eva's journey, and how the firstborn of Queen ends up.