A solid 4.2 from my end. The the power of the mc in itself is very interesting. The villain part piqued my interest in this story. I hope you don't ruin it with harem, (I've seen many novels be destroyed by such). [This is a genuine review from me] The writing quality is good considering English is the author's 3rd language. There are some mistakes here and there but nothing that will break the immersion. 4/5 Not much to be seen about the plot in the earlier chaps but it gets interesting enough. (might seem cliche to some) 4/5 The mc's character is great considering his villain side. The author has tried to display him as smart but needs a little more depth. 4/5 The updating stability has been good as far as I am concerned. 5/5 The world background is a little overused, the gate appearing theme which has been used a lot on this site (same as solo leveling). So to some readers it might seem boring but it is changed here and there, so it is acceptable. (4/5) Overall a great read to invest your time in and an awesome work by the author considering it is his first book. Hope you keep improving and keep writing. Goodluck.
My name is Walter Hartwell White. I live at 308 Negra Arroyo Lane, Albuquerque, New Mexico, 87104. This is my confession. If you're watching this tape, I'm probably dead– murdered by my brother-in-law, Hank Schrader. Hank has been building a meth empire for over a year now, and using me as his chemist. Shortly after my 50th birthday, he asked that I use my chemistry knowledge to cook methamphetamine, which he would then sell using connections that he made through his career with the DEA. I was... astounded. I... I always thought Hank was a very moral man, and I was particularly vulnerable at the time – something he knew and took advantage of. I was reeling from a cancer diagnosis that was poised to bankrupt my family. Hank took me in on a ride-along and showed me just how much money even a small meth operation could make. And I was weak. I didn't want my family to go into financial ruin, so I agreed. Hank had a partner, a businessman named Gustavo Fring. Hank sold me into servitude to
Hello, I'm sorry that I didn't update this story in October. I have often been sick since I was young (Idk, maybe my immune system is weak because I also had covid before, lol). I will be updating this story daily from November. Thanks for still waiting for my update. Also, I apologize for not being able to reply to all the comments
The story is alright but not great. Grammar is slightly questionable at times, but mostly good. The real problem is the main character is given WAY too much. He knows the future, already has his full power from the future, can control time, and his enemies are weaker since he traveled to the past. What exactly is the challenge here?
Lets be really honest. The idea of the novel is good but the implementation is not so good. I'm not so good with Grammer but then the bad pieces of grammar in various parts of the novel are mind blowing. I mean you use complex words perfectly and in the next line, there is an error in your use of simple words. Second is the attraction, we are here to read a novel where mc is overpowered, and turns to a villain. You said he was a hero who got betrayed and went back in time and decided to be a villain. Mc knows he is overpowered, Mc doesn't want to be betrayed anymore but then Mc in the early chapters wants to gather people to discuss the government and he does care if they get along or not. I don't see the sense in that. Mc say's himself there are dangerous people in the government, and that he will be low key. That's fine and all, but then, in the next few chapter after that decision, Mc does what? Slams the head of the daughter of a big name and not just that but he did it in public. At that point I just lost hope. Work on your story. Read your previous chapters before writing new ones so that there isn't much inconsistency. Let what you said be what you said and if it needs to change give a good reason. That's all I want to say. If you are new to webnovel and novels in general hen give it a try, else it's not really worth casual reading.
Well, I speak spanish, so with google translate i don't have any problem... The story development is good... the character design... well I don't really like the way he acts when he use his power to return the time.... but it's my personally opinion... and I think his power was nerfed... I know why he's trying to do... but at the same time.. I´m not sure... well could be impredictable... sounds good... In the case of world Background I could say, that it's the type of solo leveling, but worse... in the good way... and world goberment... sounds like One Piece to me... personally talking.... that's all
total time waste. tell me if you have to kill a single ant what would you do? crush it and be done. ok that ant has the power to see in future of 10 minutes. now what does it change anything if it is directly under your feet, do you need anything more. ok You have the power to slow down, pause and reverse time. now what? you still can't do. pathetic. that's what mc is. can't even kill an ant who has not even got any powers. that ant is still just a normal boy nothing special. nobody would bat an eye if he disappeared.