Chapter 1 was long, but the road was worth it! I LOVE IT! This novel is a rare jewel amongst the others. I find the family dramatic, but it can always happen in reality; especially in wester culture or even asians. In addition, the style of writing is great and the flow of the story is nice. Lastly, I am happy to see such elements included in the story elaborately written by the author. I do want to take note about some sentences that needs editting. Not all, but some. In that way, it can help readers have a smooth sail for their adventures during the plot/climax. All in all, I love your story and I hope for the best for your novel!
Reincarnation, Revenge , Romance All 3 R's can be found in this brilliant piece of work. The story is indeed interesting, as it gives the readers a vibe of old school stories but keeps it's modern essence throughout the read. I definitely recommend Reader to read this, and Yes, you are writing well. Suggestions: Kindly re-visit and re-edit your initial Chapters. Give spaces after commas. Write less bulky paragraphs. And when you do these keep a smile on your face😇
This is a wonderful novel with an interesting plot! Each chapter leaves you wanting to read more! Similar to romance novels of the same category, it has your classic villains - stepmother and rival. However, this time, the MC is transmigrated in the early chapters compared to the beginning. I have yet to read many chapters, but for the few I did read, I support the author’s journey! They have areas to improve, like grammar, but that is something fixable the longer they write. Please give this novel a chance because it is a very interesting novel with action in each chapter!
I found the premise of this story to be really interesting and engaging. The author did a good job conveying the protagonist's troubles and I love those types of stories. My real gripe was the punctuations. Remember to add a space after a comma and also put periods or the appropriate punctuations at the end of dialogues but other than that ,it's a solid read. I definitely recommend putting this in your library.
I really like this book. I mean, come on! who wouldn't... sorry i couldn't read all the chapters, but this is my analysis from the first 5 chapters. I world recommend this book to any of the fantasy-genre-loving-people. Your writing quality is awesome. I just love this book. Kudos to you for coming up with such an awesome book!