Jrmb_Eleven
Honestly I want to like this novel. I really do. Like, I see the potential it has but theres just that one thing thats really bugging me. It's the fact that he is so... submissive. Now what do I mean by that? He's clearly a dork who has never had a girlfriend in his life. He's a simpleton who would likely give up all his powers if his mom, mother (He has two moms) and sister asked him to. In our everyday language he would definitely be a simp. I think the thing that really bugged me was him admitting his secret to his sister. I said it in a comment but I found the build up for him telling the secret to be plainly infuriating and terrible. Author, in the nicest way possible I want to tell you that it was bad. But the big kicker is the fact that although he has all this power his real personality is still so...wimpy. It's Honestly disappointing and I unfortunately will choose to drop this novel. If anyone else can stand a simpleton who acts like he's chasing skirts with the mind of a 30 year old man whose never been a women then feel free.
The MC is a deplorable and submissive S.I.M.P. There really is no reason for it and just seems to happen for gags and giggles, but it gets old really fast. The story also gets derailed often and many times where the mc could just say 'no' to bothersome stuff, he took it upon himself to say yes and whine about it. The simpening started around 23 ch.
I like the story so far but I belave their needs to be more stakes involved in the story like stronger enemies from the south and thier need to be threat like if x happens in the south enemies that are capable of harming MC become involved in the MC's life. otherwise I also beleave a battle taking more than 10 chapter is a bit overkill unless it involves different groups over a larger time scale otherwise it becomes a bit repetitive. it's a good story and I hope it become more flushed out and the MC gets into more smutty situations.
I find this story really very good, a development that advances characters that seem to exist, and above all we are not in a world where the mc must fight every day to save the world by not taking advantage of life, in any case for the moment. I understand criticizing her with respect to the servile Mc with his family but it's just because he adores them, his sister hasn't put a collar on his heart that I know of, right? to conclude very interesting story to see to judge.