Anony_Mous_1902
The first chapter lays out an interesting character. And the pacing is alright. I think the author could write her characters' description into the story instead of outright telling the reader. I like the foreshadow of the drama that'll rise up later in the second chapter when they're deciding schools. All in all, a great story that I can see going far. Please keep up the writing.
I like how the character's traits are instantly developed, but I feel like that worked as a double-edged sword too. While pushing her arrogance to the extreme opens ton of room for character development throughout the story, it made it hard to read at the start because of how toxic her whole vibe was, at least in my opinion. Good work though, keep it up!
the story and plot are amazing, I like the way how the story flows and how it explains the parts but few things were spoiling the story like - punctuation marks were breaking few moments, the continuous use of a word in a single sentence (ex-i and she) that what I could point out if you fix these issues you'll rock it, good luck author you're doing awesome!