Izumi_123
Excellent, this story is a rare gem within a sea of terrible wish fullfillment naruto fanfics. The story is well thought out and the pacing is perfect. We wonβt have a harem and I have confidence in the authors ability to write a meaningful romance. The author has common sense and is yet to write anything that indicates plot armor or erratic behavior of the MC. Also, it is clear that the author is putting a lot of thought into this story, he even chose the most suitable chakra natures for a swordsman which shows his careful planning. I am excited to read more and hope this continues.
Writing quality: 3 stars the author didn't know how to make speech of high ranking people(like god, animal sages, etc) sounds poetic. it sounds like it was written by a teen. not good, but bot bad. the author didn't use words like fourth hokage, third hogake and instead use hokage only. he didn't know how to make beautiful respectful response towards important people like hogake( most of the times ) like using " i accept but where do we need to spar?" to the hokage instead of "it would be my honour to have a spar with you, hokage-sama". see the difference? Story development: 4 stars The author used a lot of long timeskips. again, not good but not bad. Character design: 3 stars The supposedly MC goal is too cliche. ya know "I want to protect my loved ones so that they wont have to fear anything!!" kind of cliche. the author repeated this a lot of times. Despite being a Sword master of our world, he lacks control over his emotions. there's a lot of other things that lacks about MC and other characters. but i wont waste my time doing it. Updating Stability: 3 stars It's 1 chapter per week. better than most i guess. World background: 4 stars Its an alternate universe of naruto because of butterfly effects that caused by previous owner of MC body as a baby. he spotted jiraiya peeking in and caused the other woman inside noticed and screams. which then caught the attention of Tsunade. and the small ball of snow rolled into a gigantic mountain of snow. ( and The MC thinks that it's jiraiya fault lol) Overall: 3.4 out of 5 Better then most naruto fanfic, but not the best.
The world of Naruto was originally incredibly large and thought out, which made it different from the rest of the anime. To be honest, when I first started reading this work, I did not expect it to be something interesting. But after all this time, I believe that if the author brings the work to the end, with the possible improvement of himself as a writer, there is a high probability that the fanfic will become one of the best on this platform. It may not even differ much in quality from the original work, although again, I judge solely by the beginning of the story. In the end, I would like to express my hope that this work will not be abandoned, because in my opinion it would be a huge disappointment that such a story will disappear into nowhere.
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It's a really great Naruto fanfiction!!! ππ I love how MC/Ren wants to be a swordman/kenjutsu user (there's not much naruto fanfic which MC want to be a swordman) and have lightning & wind chakra (that two is the most suits with swordplay), plus with lightning chakra mode he will be one of if not the most fastest and strongest ninja.. ππ Just make more interaction between Ren and his teammates, teacher, and another Naruto character (i know he want to be the strongest, but make him have interaction with others too, not just his brother).. please don't make Ren/MC an anti sosial like Sasuke... Can't wait to see next chapter.. keep up the good work author san ππππππ