TheEnlightenedSage
Writing Quality : 5* only negligible typo mistake Updates : 5* 7 chaps a week is pretty good Story : 5* so far pretty good, just need more details. Char. : 4* do steady development please. World : 4* need more details, please add movie arc Β¬That chapter with that Inari kid is felt forced. Please do MC character development steadily. Β¬Need more interaction with Hinata and show some her POV Β¬MC needs to learn Medical Ninjutsu, his control is enough, do experiments with Hashirama cell Β¬Make the story pace slower please, he is already in he is already in Elite Jonin Tier in chapter 1, I love him getting OP, but this is too fast, with this pace in less 100 chap he will dominate naruto world and go other universe. π
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I can't even start to imagine how so much people can rate this at 5 stars... It's really unpleasant to read, there's a lot of typos, the grammar is below average. World building and character design are inexistant but it's maybe because I only read 10 chapters but I can't stand more. All the characters are OOC and the MC is an as*hole and an evil psychopath and for no reason... The only MC's goal is to become the strongest, it's okay when we know all the sh*t that will happen to Naruto in the canon but there's no need to become a psychopath in order to do so, not when you are the 9 tailed jinchuriki, knowledge of everything in Naruto verse and have a system to help you...
Writing quality......its not that bad the grammar i mean.... Updates........?what do i even say here? Story development.......essentially story development is skipping all the important parts by using a time skip, like how did naruto suddenly posses the reanimation jutsu......or like how we missed the milestone of him making new fuinjutsu seals.....or skipping most of the parts on how he could even grow stronger aside from the *usual* training the naruto fanfics use. Character design.......mc isnt cunning......just retarded.........he sacrificed an innocent genin and blackmailed him by using the genins family against him, character development....is almost negligible.......negligible because there was CD in the start.....with shikamaru.....but aside from that.....every other character was practically added there for the sake of adding it there......Ex: Hinata.............yep dunno a thing except apparantly mc changed her by the use of a Legendary Time Skip....so yeah more details left untold...... World background.....non existent, if i could leave this with a zero i would but yeah.....you cant.... This novel is like one of those, where the only thing thats being "built-up" is the MC power and not really the mc himself.......yeah not my type of novel. Good luck with the novel though, just because i may not like it, doesnt mean others willπ€·π€·π€·
WQ = O.K SU = Average SD = Worst CD = Can it be more than Worst? WB = Like your usual Naruto Fanfics. I wonder if there is some one that read this review but, MC is pretty much the sole reason of the downfall of this Novel with good beginning but took nose dive after several couple of chapter until having enough at chapter 11. or 10 .
WARNING!!! WARNING!!! The mc is definitely a psychopath who has no qualms with killing innocent people or their families to get whatever he wants. Be warned if this is not something that interests you, if youβre neutral about it then itβs fine, heβs essentially someone who doesnβt have real friends or care about human life. The MC will befriend you and if you mess with a goal of his or are in the wrong place at the wrong time, youβre getting a Kusnadi to the back of the head. Writing quality 5/5 pretty self explanatory, there are typos but otherwise grammar and spelling are good. Stability of updating 5/5 its stable at the time Iβm writing this, could change. Story development 5/5 great story, a little rushed but pretty good read. Character design 4/5 I liked the character, but others might not. World background 3/5 itβs a fanfic so since the author didnβt put any work into this aspect of writing I just went for a neutral 3/5. I like this fic, I felt like the mc didnβt have his psychopathic tendencies explored enough but otherwise it was good. The MC almost reflects the way we as readers look at fiction, all of the extraneous people are trash npcs who shouldnβt be cared about. 99.99% of the planet is just nobodies who only serve to advance the plot and should be sacrificed for the mc to reach his end goal.
Iβm not sure what this was even going for? Everything seems half-baked and seems whish fufilling, but only if you condone murdering innocent people, manipulating everyone you love, abusing the Souls of the parents that died for you and etc... Is the writer okay? Like this has me a little concerned since the writer seems to agree (out of character) with the acyions of the MC.