Navy_King
Amazing! Simply amazing. This novel has everything. It's well written and you can see that author really tries. A lot of thought is put into every single line. This is an author with a proper plan for the storyline. You can see the plot developing little by little. It's something hard to see on this website.
This story has evolve beautifully almost in every aspect. The best points by far has to be the authors audacity. He used the Naruto world but he made his own story, this fic is it's own story with no overreliance on the original plot. Almost every character have their own development and personality, each evolving differently as the story goes. The protagonist stays loyal to his personality and does not fear affecting the plot. The only 2 issues I found where the MC battle style. He can combine his dv fruit with chakra yet his attacks are REALLY basic. It lacks the creativity and flexibility of Naruto attacks, like the attacks that resemble sentian being like the dragon attacks or the creativity of the ninja world with the elements. The second issue I see is the author tendency to repeat himself twice in the same paragraph. [Fake example]: MC smiled with happiness after saving Joe doe, everyone saw how MC smiled with happiness after saving Joe doe. The initiate repetition of the event doesn't really add anything. Besides this I can say that the Author improvement throughout the story is incredible.
Well in my humble opinion, of course without offending anyone who thinks differently from my point of view, but also by looking at this matter in a different way and without fighting and by trying to make it clear, and by considering each and everyone's opinion, I honestly believe that I completely forgot what I was going to say.
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It's good but a little bit overrated not gonna lie. So we start off with aokiji, the youngest member in the Yuki clan, who secretly holds the soul of a 20yo transmigrater, being given kuzan's df from one piece he became the 'ice man' . Very interesting concept. However I don't get why you had him reincarnate like almost 50 years before Canon, he already knows the future, has a very strong cheat being his logia type df, so by the time the akatsuki start doing akatsuki things he would be so overpowered it's literally not gonna matter what they do. I mean imagine it, by the age of 7 he already beat A JONIN, the so called 'elite ninja' (underneath only anbu in power/ranking) , has mastered the majority of marines 6 powers which would normally take atleast years to do so. It's so comedic when he's this powerful and still thinks/cares about madara and danzo, they really shouldn't be an issue if you can basically freeze an entire army without breaking a sweat. The side characters are fine by themselves, nothing too special just a little bit too generic and boring, take the kaguya clan for example (mei, her brother and father) they are so stupid it's actually insane how a clan this dumb hasn't already collapsed from within, it's also very hard to take them seriously when all they do is abuse their youngest member who managed to unlock his bone powers for no reason, just to appear 'cool' and 'different' I guess. The writing style is somewhat decent, although you could improve the characters interaction with each other a lot.
at the time of 133 chapters: I really liked the story. chic character. good interaction and character development. very much described world. now the cons: - too slow development of the whole story. consists almost entirely of fillers, not plot. - Mito's decision about punishing danzΕ... not realistic. She would have killed him and that's it. - too much unnecessary information about other characters. it seems that the story is not about mΡ, but about others.