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I love how the story goes. The development at first is a bit shaky. At first I thought the MC is too OP but as the story progressed it shows stability and balance. It is also my second favorite next to chrysalis(of course because it is FREE and not to mention the story is good as well). I would love to see it not in premium in the future or if it will I wish the quality stays the same or even became better.
IT is a very interesting start, The way the main character first gets his game system is interesting and I'm happy for once, that the girl isn't a complete scumbag like in most stories. The grammar is strange in places, but you can tell this is from someone who's English is their second language and it's great and still readable and enjoyable.
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very stable with updates, and to be honest it is a good story. HOWEVER , the writing is a bit funky, and grammer is pretty bad. not to the point it's unreadable , it can be enjoyed with a bit of effort. mc starts out horribly stupid however, and honestly the first 10 chapters will likely give you an aneurysm. character decisions do improve though. highly suggest Author find an editor though, it honestly the biggest thing holding this back.
Not a bad way to pass time but not even 5 chapters in we see the first plothole. I decided to review after reading all the free chapters out currently and that isn't the only issue, so many things are just never explained like how the MC's main class went from unarmed to cultivator or when he upgraded it from apprentice to silver rank. The series is called my magical system but the system is actually called the soul system that uses soul energy and he is a Cultivator not a magician.
Nah I didn't like it It's kind of strange the stupidity of the protagonist even though he proclaims himself to be smart and he said he was a gamer but he doesn't act like someone who has a brain not to mention that the writing is kind of confusing since you can't understand when it's a thought and when it's a speech and also the protagonist talks while fighting so you lose a sense of time just like when you're having movement in fights it's hard to understand what they're doing as you mention some things that happened in the fight after the action was done
Not gonna lie your grammer is trash and you should probobly fix that but besides that you should also be more in depth about topics like when he lit the candel he mentions he has a sister but thats something that should have been mentioned when you introduced us to the uncle not on ch 40 Besides that you have a really Good idea it is like a 7/10 right now but if you could fix the grammer and plot holes its a 9/10 if not 10/10 story
At first i dropped this book twice but after that it started get affect me and i couldn't stop, You could hate some certain FL's but they become cuter later on, But it was a waste that they couldn't get enough time there is a serious harem potential here but its lacking apart from that mc was very stupid at first but he becomes better later on story and he was similar to certain mc that i couldn't remember his name but better version of it and i didn't mind grammar too much since i'm a person that not too great with grammars myself and My biggest complaint is chapters comes too slow ):
The way this story starts is quite confusing as the change in MC is way too extreme be his personality, power or anything else. After that the story becomes stable and is going in a good direction. Updates are slow. There is almost description regarding the world or the power levels involved. The struggle of MC is real as he didnt inherit memories of new body so looking forward to it