This is an interesting story. The plot has my attention and the characters are relatable. I would work a bit on the grammar (capitalization) and add more description to the story (describing how people look, what the environment looks like, emotions, physical feelings, thoughts of characters). Best wishes author.
honestly its a good book but too fast paced in the start but after some chapters its pretty interesting and i especially like the way you expressed the system and the use of emojis to show emotions of system , I'm in love with it hope you continue [img=update][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
Well I think story can be improved better like I would give you to important advices: 1. Improve you grammar better. I know that sometimes it's hard ( I have problems with grammar to) but you can correct them using different apps. 2. Don't rush your story that it's really important. I can't say much about the MC because I feel story is rushed but it can be improved. Overall I think this story can be interesting if you improve these things Good luck author 🤞 P.S FL has a similar name as mine :)