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Reviews of military girl stuck with mafia system

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military girl stuck with mafia system

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DonDenis
DonDenisLv2DonDenis

The story's been brilliant so far, good world building and nice pacing to it. It's also structurally okay. I'm hoping the author is able to keep up the good work and even improve further. Good work author!

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MsBamasAngel
MsBamasAngelLv1MsBamasAngel

Alex is so strong willed and mature. I got to chapter 9 but still reading it. It is a interesting story. I'll continue reading this story. Kudos to the author.

Sa_Sa_Mi
Sa_Sa_MiLv3Sa_Sa_Mi

I like how Alex is so mature, strong and independent... when reading novels, I always search for how the writer designs his female characters, and I think that I really like her. I am eager to know how will the story continue... keep writing <3

Brian_Hanes_117
Brian_Hanes_117Lv1Brian_Hanes_117

This is an interesting story. The plot has my attention and the characters are relatable. I would work a bit on the grammar (capitalization) and add more description to the story (describing how people look, what the environment looks like, emotions, physical feelings, thoughts of characters). Best wishes author.

Anabel_orezi
Anabel_oreziLv2Anabel_orezi

to be sincere author did a good work in character personality and plot development, little grammatical errors which can be overlook nice work author 👍

Brandy_Bear
Brandy_BearLv1Brandy_Bear

I've always loved novels with gang and mafia like setting this is a really nice read, I love alex and her relationship with her family it's a truly nice read all together.

Kiran_Imdad
Kiran_ImdadLv1Kiran_Imdad

honestly its a good book but too fast paced in the start but after some chapters its pretty interesting and i especially like the way you expressed the system and the use of emojis to show emotions of system , I'm in love with it hope you continue [img=update][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]

JaRi09
JaRi09Lv1JaRi09

I love it so far! Though the writing snags me a little bit, the story itself and the mystery of it really make me want to read more and stick with it!

KyrieUzumaki
KyrieUzumakiLv10KyrieUzumaki

The story is a little confusing and it feels a little rushed there is some errors in your writing but no one is perfect :) I did get a little confused on who was talking in The second chapter of story. I do like The POVs of The female mainlead and getting her point of veiw of things.

Rainbow420
Rainbow420Lv3Rainbow420

This is really a nice story. I read, I feel it naturally. Keep writing your book. Thank you for yout book. Best of luck. Nice Nice Nice Good story.

Luv_Freek
Luv_FreekLv1Luv_Freek

I'm a fan of Mafia and CEO romance, this is pretty good except from the constant writing and spelling error but altogether is a good one. I also like the distinction in her name like.. Alex is usually a guys name but her it was a girl, good idea.

PerkyPompous_Pixie
PerkyPompous_PixieLv3PerkyPompous_Pixie

This is def an easy and simple read as we, the readers, read the progression of the MC. I would suggest you proofread your work again and if it helps, try using Grammarly for minor ones. All the best, author!

aleksandra_pano10
aleksandra_pano10Lv1aleksandra_pano10

Well I think story can be improved better like I would give you to important advices: 1. Improve you grammar better. I know that sometimes it's hard ( I have problems with grammar to) but you can correct them using different apps. 2. Don't rush your story that it's really important. I can't say much about the MC because I feel story is rushed but it can be improved. Overall I think this story can be interesting if you improve these things Good luck author 🤞 P.S FL has a similar name as mine :)

Maryam_Mayo
Maryam_MayoLv1Maryam_Mayo

You started the novel in a sequence, the way you design your characters is highly appreciable, keep writing fellow novelist, ...............

Bella_Jackos
Bella_JackosLv10Bella_Jackos

I like your story especially the way you talked about the characters background in the first chapter, hope you keep updating this it's really good