Heaven_Dream
Novels with MC that use Earthen knowledge in another world is a premise I love. I will be tuning in for sure, each week and I hope it pans out. Now there are a few issues, the biggest being the MC. I trap I see you(the author) falling into is making the MC op. That leads to no character growth and so forth.
I will say first, The beginning could have been more dramatic, how you started. But overall It was okay, enjoyable. There are some mistakes in writing If you revise those carefully, You will able to improve pretty much good. The story development and world background is up to my expectation. In these few chapters, you have managed it cool. So at the last, I will say it's okay, there are some areas to improve. Eventually, you will get better and hope later you will able to fill up those missing charms.
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