Reviews of Magic Shop System
Magic Shop System
Eternal_Demon
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- Writing Quality
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- Character Design
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Well, the book is well-written. The only thing that bothers me is because the MC is totally inexperienced but of course he can also gain that, hoping for the story and the MCs stable growth.
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I wont deny, i enjoyed book.. it is one of the very few system based novels that i like, but unfortunately there are two huge loopholes in the plot in recent chapters. that turned my mood sour. 1. about khrom and rayna: khrom was incredibly guilty after he misjudged his wife and killed he, but suddenly he started new married life, just after a few months.. how does that make sense?? i would have no complaints if his wife was killed by others, then the story makes sense.. but when aythor added that he misjudged his wife, killed her and incredibly guilty for his action, romantic development with rayna doesn't make sense. 2. this one is way more fatal than previous one. both siblings seldom remember their parents. okay, even if i understand that they are worried inside, but dont have the power to do anything, thats why they are just waiting.. thats also good. but suddenly mc went on a business trip, he didnt think that his parents can come back in mean time. okay they were aboyt to come back in some days, so that does not matter. most importantly, after accidentally arriving into anothet empire, why are they settling down. instead of going back.???? why did her sister said nothing when mc proposed to start a shop in the capital?? if author notice my review, i would be grateful if you are kind enough to give me a proper explanation. or please correct these two loopholes, such obvious loopholes hurt my head. anyway, you rock, thank you for writing such an amazing book. please dont make it trash in later stages, or i will cry.. for me this is a master piece
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Near chap 50 60 the story become unbelievable. The characters are weird, interaction weirder, everyone in this world is a arrogant - backstaber - young master - dumb grunt - idiot (chose some and mix them you have 99% of the character). And this make the story go bad. The idea of the shop is good but the story dev and charac dev are ruining it. Its honestly tiring to read again and again and again about Im X and Im gonna trash your shop. Oh no I get beaten. Lets call Y and he will trash your shop loop. Plus there is no law system at all it seems ? You can kill people and and be fine with that. Its a bit weird in modern settings, and it doesnt help with the story here because of the huge ammount of murderer/criminal in the world (all except the mc sister so far, so about 99.9%, even if we could say mc is kind of justified) The writing is average. Not bad, not exceptional. Anyways im disapointed in the story. I can t keep reading it.
If you like reading about an arrogant egoti idiot. then this is the book for you The author is a good author I didnโt see any grammatical errors or major problems with the story that make it unreadable. But the main character is so arrogant and stupid that Iโm surprised that heโs not dead by chater 5 I will keep reading the book for now see if thereโs any character growth maybe he becomes humble later on in the book.
I donโt know what to say. I really like this shop novels but this story is too dumb. Mc has some hard anger issues . Gets beaten by a weakling but acts incredible hard against ppl that could pinch him to deaths . The icharscter nteractions are just unbelievable and he is a Simp. Mom has some red marks and is obviously ill, yeah why should I care . Everybody can do what he wants . There should be at least Some basic laws . Why then bother with money and not rob everything ? First he gets thrashed and then he behaves like a king . I canโt Read It anymore .
The granmer is above the average in webnovel. The updates are consistent. You charecter needs a lot of work. The charecter acts like a 13 Year old boy. whoโs second chance at life didโt tought him anything. The charecter made referances of Mc systems but doesnโt understand why his system has a quirky personality. World building is big part of the story, so, far the setting of your story remains vague. Please go more in detail to understan The circumstances your charecter is under base on the locations he is. and please read a business book. Your charecter setting is a business, your buSiness Sense sucks, honestly.
Hiya author, The book is lit. The system adventure is too great to describe well. I love how MC is gonna create a world by his own. The power, struggle and journey aka adventure seems promising. Highly recommended to the new authors and those who love adventure. Free warriors ,go read this book. It is a lit.
