Lucifer's horrors circus

This is highly recommended for the people who love horror.. You are succeeded in planting fear and thrill.. I am sorry after third chapter I didn't dare to read, I can't take any more how they are treating Jonah Coming to writing quality : break your long paragraphs into small ones which will help readers to read easily. There are some grammar mistakes but it doesn't disturb the flow. You misspelled Jonah name to Jonas please check it again.

I like the style of the story quite a lot, it gives a feeling of some classic books. The story is interesting and feels like a proper horror story with the narration.

This story is quite interesting. I really like thriller and horror genre. And this story has kept my interest. Even though these are the beginning chapters I am already intrigued. Can't wait for the next chapters. Keep up the good work author!!!!

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The cover of the book is so cute! I'm obsessed with the plot and character. So unique and intricate. It's such a fresh and interesting idea. All I can suggest is make the paragraphs shorter. Overall, it's soooo cool. Please keep writing :)

Ever since I read the synopsis I can say that this is indeed a hooking story. You're good with dragging attention. The Spanish setting is also very refreshing to see. It fits well the theme of the story. However, you tend to tell so much and show little in comparison. By reading the first chapter you can already know most of the struggles and motivations of the main character, something bad for a genre that relies on mystery and the unknown. There's also the fact that some of your sentences can become redundant. Sometimes after a dialogue, you put what the dialogue just said. You need to work on your grammar. If you're not an English native speaker you can get a grammar correcting app. Avoid these mistakes, try fixing some of the ones you've already made, and keep working on it. Even with all of this, the story flows goodly and has the hook element that makes you want to keep following it.

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This is amazing, I love the way you write it. I'm not into this stuff but your story is incredible, I am rooting for you, dear author! you worked hard, great job!

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