Gery_
It is only four chapters, you cannot tell much from, but at this point, you are doing a good job. Your synopsis was good and got me interested and you storytell well. I like your writing style, it is nice. You set up a god worldbuilding, showing us a new world and hiw things are done there. The only problem is the bit of grammar mistakes. If you look back and reread your story, you can catch the mistakes. Keep up the good work!
Consider this as an early review to show support to the dear author. Its just 3 chapters yet but the writing style is wonderful and the grammar is perfect as well. The author has created an interesting world and characters. This is the type of story where once you read it, you will look forward to every chapter. At the moment I rate it as 4./5. Waiting for the story to unfold.
A very interesting story, The story had a very intriguing prologue and is written well. The character of the MC and other side characters are described well. There are minor grammatical errors, but nothing that will prevent you from the smooth experience of a great read. The world seems very interesting, and there is definitely a hook factor. As there are only 3 chapters so far, I can not comment on the other aspects, but it has got great potential. Well done!
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