lucifer_112
So I like the premise of the story. But there are no punctuations like fullstop or comma. So it's like you are reading one continuous sentence. Also I don't know if the Author wants to improve or not but he should really consider this stuff. I mean adding a fullstop after a complete sentence is a basic requirement to be an author.
I couldn't make it past the first chapter with how god awful the flow of reading went. I felt like I was reading an elementary school students fantasy story. Grammar is hardly used or just used incorrectly, and the sentences are hard to comprehend due to how unnecessary some of the lines are. I feel like the author was adding more words to a sentence to make it longer. (EX from ch1: My name is Alex Walker. I was a college student who led a normal life, except that I'm an orphan. Who grew up in an orphanage until school and moved to college dorms for college and doing part-time jobs for money. It all worked out well until today) this could have been way simpler as this instead. (EX: My name is Alex Walker, I was a full-time collage student getting by through part-time jobs. I grew up as an orphan, so there was little money to fund my living expenses, so I opted to live in the collage dorms. It all worked out well, until today, that is.)
El sentido del humor es malisimo, la calidad de la historia también el protagonista es repelente y te llega a entrar ganas de matarlo y nada tiene sentido en la historia no volvería a leer esta "novela" por llamarla de alguna manera y no volvería a leer la por nada del mundo parece un fanfic de un mal fanfic chino.
You get a truly OP MC for the first 2 worlds. Then at chapter 60 or around there. He suddenly acts like hes 15 and like a soy boy cuck and starts trying to have a relationship with a 15-17 year old girl. Even though its stated hes at least mid 30's. VERY NOT COOL! He goes from OP awesome fun guy to crying and bowing before a woman who is almost 20 years younger then him. And this is supposedly a DRAGON GOD?!?!?!?! This along with the badly written dialog I could get over because the author is not a native english speaker but along with how the story is going its too much to take.
I would dare say this fanfic is gold except for the mc being way too childish and acting immature at every turn. His actions and op powers makes him an object of fear and headache for the more paranoid people inspite of being a relatable, funny and likable character. To be fair if mc met batman in the dc verse the latter would get a migraine large enough to put him into a coma indefinitely.
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