mrant12
I would say it's a good story except for the fact that the story seems to be written with children with mind... Some people may enjoy these type of work... where mc is dumb asf and a brainless fool... yes need growth time and what not but bro first think of the setup he has then say he needs growth ... if it was a goody two shoes then i would say this setup is justified... but with his experience and livelihood his behavior literally says it's bs... no offense to the author... it's good but it's just not for me... keep up the good work... I enjoyed the unique concept... but you character creation ruined it for me... anyway do your best... good luck...đđ
The writing quality is fantastic and it is apparent that the author has some prior experience in writing novels, so on that front, it is excellent. The characters are well written the story is intriguing. The inner monologue of the mc is descriptive but also concise at the same time. The exposition is also really good. Overall a very enjoyable read. Best od luck to the author
Though there is only two chapters, I'm sure you can do better. What's really confusing me though is the absence of quotations. Usually, in dialogue, quotations were used to separate dialogue from the narrative. If you can do that, I'm sure this would be a great story. That is the only flaw I have as of now. You can do it!
One of the high-quality Sci-fi I have seen in this platform. The grammar is amazingly exceptional for its high output. I must compliment the author for this as we all know that most writers here have terrible grammars. It is normal considering their high output of chapters. Generally WN writers typically updated once a day or twice a day. Most writers barely could write 600 words a week. It's grammar is actually better than Mech Touch, and its plot are much faster than Mech Touch too. Though if you'd like to start in Sci-fi genre I recommend reading The Legendary Mechanic, Mechanical Emperor, The Great Machine Sage, and the Mech Lord
The story is solid, the world-building is respectable, and it is an easy read. One thing that I would change is adding more visual description. Visual description entails what the characters look like and the environment does. If I'm reading a story about mechs and with a lot of cool technology then I want to be able to visualize the scene. I wish you the best on your future endeavors author. Keep in mind we all have different values, Feel free to check out my story "Avatar: Macai's Journey."
Absolute Gem of a book well worth the wait for more chapters to release also great plot but I wonât spoil anything for yâall hope the book stay coin less so everyone can injoy the book. So everyone can Appreciate the authors hard work that he has put into his book. Keep them chapter rolling author the anticipation is killing me
Excellent writing might I begin with. The story is somewhat refreshing from the mecha novels I have grown use to. The protagonist is portrayed to be a young but cynical lad who has been raised knowing the harsh cruel realities of the real world. With such a premise you are often left wondering 'what will happen next' once you are done with the chapter. The English in this novel also far exceeds those common to web novel, with every sentence being easily understandable. Overall the novel was quite the interesting read, a hidden gem if you will. I highly recommend it!
Solid. Really solid, I mean like steel in its solid form solid. The pacing was the first thing I noticed. It's so fine, you'll miss your bus if you try to read in a "hurry" since the author drops the characterization and the world background in all the right places. I don't remember reading about mecha before and this set the bar so high that I won't remember any mecha books after this one, either. The sudden surge towards greater power is well executed and the plot feels real. I have nothing to complain about. Again, pacing, characterization, plot, world background, all on point. I wanted to find stuff to complain about. I didn't. This deserved the WPC win.