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Review #2 [FictionOnlyReaders' Author Review] At the time of this post, this review is the 269th review of this story. (200+Nice!) Current Story stats: Regular chapters: 125 || Aux chapters: 1 Collections: 11.55K || Views: 3.47M || Average Word Count: 3.36K || Rating: 4.84 Stars My rating: 5 STARS || Reason: Because I like my story, that's it. My review was too long and wasn't being accepted, so I have broken it down and put it in comments. Please go down to see the rest. Just like always, Review, comment, add to the library and share this fic. Thx. Regards, FictionOnlyReader (LET'S GO!)
Normally I just read and don't leave any comments but I had to leave a review for this one. This fanfiction started off with a decent idea, waking up in a wealthy pure blood child and practicing magic like a fanfiction addict would. The author ruined the fanfiction for me when the mc: 1. Had a magic core and goes through 'growth' phases at certain ages. 2. Chose to go to Hogwarts when as a Harry Potter fan you know the teachers suck and the standards are terrible. 3. Made wands the devil, where the mc is afraid of using a wand as it will stop his core's growth. 4. Uses and practices wandless magic in front of students and at students without a cover (his fake wand which he left in his room for some reason) while saying he's trying to keep it a secret (I guess he forgot about all the portraits spying too). 5. Reused lines from the original story even though it takes place like a year earlier (I guess Dumbledore uses the same lines every year now) 6. very bad romance with a 12 year old.
There are a couple of things I really dislike about this story: I absolutely loathe transmigration with memory / identity loss tropes. I believe it's the lowest form of fanfiction. There's something very off about the sentence structure and grammar that makes this story uncomfortable to read. ππππππππππππππππππππππππππππ
Buddy, after reading the first two chapters of this fan fiction, there is only one thing I want to say. Thank you. Finally a character who is not overpowered and doesn't start practicing the goddamn unforgivables by the age of 11 and actually experiences difficulty in harnessing his accidental magic. Just like you I am an avid reader of the Harry Potter fabrications and have read close to 800 of them. Out of all of them, I only managed to find less than 10 which explored the journey of learning magic realistically. So the fact that you are doing just that and addressing issues that other fanfics don't usually deal I'm like guilt, is a huge win in my opinion. Your grammar is near perfect and the conversations font seem forced, so I am sticking with this. Hope you don't hit a writer's block on this book as well, cause I like your other fabric and have still not given up on it.
So my review was deleted but the countless of 5/5 reviews that are from the same accounts stay? Story HAD potential but it became garbage. You can skip the trash parts aka the vault parts and still know everything so you wont miss anything. MC gets embarrassed by Wormtail and loses an eye lol i wouod go more into detail eith how bad this fic is wnd how much of s waste of time it is but slim chance anyone will read this review lol too many reviews and so many repeated 5/5 reviews that wont get deleted but mine will lol garbage story
the author wanted to create an MC Op in the Hp world, but he didn't want this MC to change the canon, so you ask me how the author compensated for the presence of the MC and the canon remaining the same? the potters survived and had 2 children, so he justified that it's "AU" and in all the remarkable moments in the canon it happened the same because it's an "Au" or the MC becomes incredibly dumb or he becomes weak in moments that you need to use the power
a whole lot of build up with zero pay off, author and MC are far far too passive to the point where it's just the Harry potter books with a side character who should be and could be doing more. look at the last 20 chapters and you'll find countless readers complaining and frankly the author deserves far worse. nothing but a drought of creativity.
this story is so incredible that I canβt even begin to describe it, the details are perfect, you feel like youβre in the scene and imagining the world and the work behind being a good wizard, itβs not just sitting around and nobody is ready more can enter my mind, it is so perfect that it hurts to wait for new chapters, congratulations author you are amazing.
why would I read this knowing the author is someone who leaves his work unfinished ? this review may be unrelated to this story but I can't bring myself to read anymore of your work. I was huge fan of your KNB fanfic and I liked it very much, seriously, it's a wonder to me how many people keep reading this fiction knowing your irresponsibility to your fans and work.
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Spoiler Warning: The first ~300 ch were fine its the where he goes back into the sin vault again it goes downhill, for me. I especially dont like the future version of mc comes and helps the past mc. It just seems like lazy writing to fix his plot hole. And i hate that the future self just memory wipes the whole interaction and then mind controls his past self, becuase from therefore we dont know how much is the originals mcβs decisions or the futures mc mind manipulation. We dont know the lasting effect the mind manipulation will have on the mc, basically creating a different character in my opinion.
I was a Patreon for a few months and really liked this the first like 160 chapters. It was fun to read about the vaults, magic, and Quinn as a person. However the author now is clearly trying to milk Patreon given how lengthy the social fillers were and fourth year, as well as the stupidity of Quinn KNOWING Voldemortβs plans fully and yet still had no plans to get rid of the horcruxes and the war effort before it could escalate. Not to mention we follow canon events and timeline and of course he would end up getting involved with the trio. Add onto a very annoying romance set up with unlikable one dimensional teenage girls - basically no personality and can use one adjective to describe them, and Iβm no longer interested. Now itβs just not worth anyoneβs time