Alexander_the_grey
This a dxd fanfic but mc dont have a harem so of course this automaticaly become a trash dxd fanfic. worst of all author is one of these crazy people that dont like to change a pairing even in a fanfiction so grafyia the best girl of the series continue with the 2 worst character and siscon sirzech, so the level of this fic is even worse than a wish fulfilment one for me
I'll be straight up honest bruh, everything was like 4-5 stars up till chapter 50, that's where everything started going downhill, bro got us attached to characters like da Vinci and Moka and just kinda gave them to other dudes, Mike to his son and Vinci to azazel MIGHT also have his other kids under his first son in thier peerage which he said he might to, if he does its just gonna go down even more, everything just had a downgrade, everything's forced and kinda bland now and characters(some)are doing some weird personality swap all the time
Honestly I should have have just listened to the critic reviews. The story is overall well put together with pretty good grammar and story development. Things are fine until chapter 49, but it isn't NTR like people are saying. It simply comes down to the author changing their mind about Moka being in the MCs harem, but the way its done feels like a massive betrayal to the readers. The author set expectations for Moka to join the MCs harem, built them up very well, but got chapter 49 and basically did a 180. Basically the author tells the readers Lith can't see Moka that way because she was a 'daughter figure', but turns around and makes Moka fall in love with her 'brother figure' in a few sentences. I get it author, you changed your mind and thats fine... but tell us how it happened. It was basically 'his son's blood tastes good too (100+ years timeskip) Moka loves his son now' ggez
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Step 1: Create a waifu in story Step 2: Set her up, show her interest in MC Step 3: Do a timeskip during which waifu does 180 and goes for the son of MC Step 4: ??? Step 5: Live on with disappointment of what you have read just now Okay, to be fair, in my opinion the idea of having potential waifu change her mind for a someone is not bad at all. The issue was how it was delivered. For quite a few chapters there was a build-up showing that waifu wants to be with MC and is trying to break his 'defenses'. And then instead of showing us how she develops feelings for someone else and that she only feels familial love to MC we got a FAT TIMESKIP that just causes 180 of emotional development up to now. On top of that said waifu stays as one of the pieces of the MC instead of joining her new love which only increases giant disappointment. I do not believe that MC got NTR-d but can definitely see why some people say that.
Author has never heard of "show, don't tell." Literally every single chapter is the main character explaining what happened in his own head/as the narrator. Almost nothing actually happens in a different way. It reads less like a story and more like an info dump where the protagonist lets us know everything that happened.
First of all: Don't be fooled by the chapter-count. If we consider the average length of a chapter on this platform, then this marvellous piece of fiction settles somewhere between 100 and 150 chapters at the point of this review. Writing Quality: The amount of mistakes is negligible and most of those are typos. Phrasing, dialogue and scene setting are superbly well done. Story Development: After an interesting prologue, the main character has a rather unique start into the world of DxD. He starts way before canon and the author does not rush. His pacing is well done and the time skips are reasonable with a well written recap of important happenings. If you want to know more, you should read the story, as I don't want to spoil anything. Character Design: The MC is a tad manipulative, but it never takes over the story to the point where we see schemes within schemes and plots within plots. Instead, he uses refreshing honesty where necessary, having mastered the ability to manipulate with well set kernels of truth. He is also well versed with lies and deception, as well as brute force, should it be necessary. He is rather intelligent, which actually shows in his actions, rather than just in the authors praise. Secondary main characters (as calling them supporting cast or even side characters would be rather insulting) is where the author really shines. He takes the time to flesh them out and give them personalities, that actually develop in a believable way. Sometimes, when there is a timeskip, that spans over a longer period of time, he'll skim over the development. They do act in a way fitting their characters, though, and we get small details over the course of the story, that explain the quirks and characteristics we see in them. This makes them relatable and fun to read. There wasn't a single PoV, that I truly disliked yet in this story. Updating Stability: Well, it's very nearly enough to sate my appetite for... nope, can't lie to you. It won't ever be enough. But his updates are rather stable and the chapter length is fantastic. World Background: He uses the DxD-verse as a template and borrows from other franchises in a playful and very integrative way. Nothing, that he writes into his story seems out of place, everything fits. The way he does that is honestly a bit admirable. Overall: This is the second time I've given a genuine 5-star review, I think? I'm rather picky in what to review, and most of the stories, that manage to impress me enough to post one have a little thing, that's a bit lacking. Not this one, though. Please try to get i to it, I'm rather sure you won't regret it!
I like the premise of an unfulfilled life getting a second chance. I like that you went over a setting that not many explore. Yet for all the excitement I felt before even reading your first episode I couldn't finish it. I have read a fair amount of fanfic so I have plenty experience with Gary Stu's type of characters and while some might be bearable I have learnt that neither of them end up being the least enjoyable as the story goes on. Still I end up reading them in hopes that someone surprises me making it work. With that said, I'm astounded by your main character monologue's in the first episode. It is so unique in a way that Paula Smith's coined term is not even remotely close to describe his pathological manifestation of self worth. He is not the perfect hero, he isn't smart, he isn't a moral pantheon either and I just know that at the moment he opens his mouth this character won't be the most attractive male on earth either. Yet for some reason the author thinks MC is. I believe we are in front of something new, and that demands a new term.
The first half was good, but the second half is not. Itβs kinda like the actual story itself is gone at this point and all the author is doing is continuing to drop other anime/media characters into this βstoryβ to continue it. No joke every chapter we kept getting introduced to new characters nowβ¦Itβs not a sustainable way to keep a story going or have it be interesting to read. The second half of this story honestly needs to be completely scrapped or rewritten because itβs just plain bad at this point.