Devesh_Kulkarni
I'm only up to chapter 32. So far, and I'm enjoying the story; the main character appears smart, intelligent, and decisive, all of which are characteristics of a great MC. The story appears to be well-planned, and the character designs are solid, but there is a good amount of room for growth through better descriptions and more engaging character behaviors. To truly elevate this story, I believe the author must establish compelling relationships between the MC and the other characters through genuine and engaging interactions. Also, there need to be numerous situations in which our MC showcases his supremacy, hehe. (I am not a huge fan of hiding in the shadows forever) Nevertheless, the story is heading in the right direction. Even though author-chan doesn't need it (haha), I'm sending my best his or her way.
Its a story about a lazy genius, who rebirthed into a fantasy world. He’s still a genius, but he doesn’t act like it because *spoiler*. The writing quality is quite good, and there’s only a few minor mistakes that won’t affect your reading experience. There seems to be a lot of potential within this story, but whether the author can pull create another piece of garbage, or make a masterpiece is in the air for now. Overall, seems like a decent story.
well mc is as lazy as i am but he has talent to back it up but i don't:( so we got a mc who is lazy, unmotivated, and has no ambition and well this type of character almost always makes the story boring but in the latest chapter it can be seen that mc in future maybe begin to realise that if he wants lazy time then he has to earn it buy working hard and fighting back. i hope there will be good fighting scenes.
1. I got a dig bick 2. You that read wrong 3. You read that wrong too 4. You checked 5. You smiled 7. You are wandering why you are still reading this 8. You saw that mistake, right? (On 7) 10. But did you see that I skipped 6? 10. You checked 11. And saw you that I doubled 10 and skipped 9 12. I said "saw you" not you saw 13. I also skipped 2 14. You got tricked 15. I'm just wasting your time, but if you were entertained, leave a like and happy reading! 16. This is by no means, copied. It's original.
I stumbled upon this ongoing WebNovel and I'm so glad I did! The author's updates are consistent and I always look forward to the next chapter. The world-building is incredibly detailed and immersive, and the characters are complex and multifaceted. With each chapter, the plot thickens and leaves me on the edge of my seat, eagerly anticipating what's to come. Even though the story isn't finished yet, I'm already invested in the outcome and can't wait to see how it all ends. I highly recommend this WebNovel to anyone looking for a thrilling ongoing read!
Review at ch 40: Firstly I highly dislike the cliche of intelligent but lazy. Even if someone is intelligent, he can't become top of the world, do phd really fast, without any hard work. Lazy people can't do so. Intelligent but lazy is just a fantasy, and so I dislike it. Secondly I dislike how ethan (mc) didn't told anyone about his uncle's schemes, and could have been killed when he fainted for days. Even after waking up, he didn't told anyone, given that he could fall into such defenseless state again. So I dislike that part. Apart from that, the story is alright, just average.
Okay, I like the general idea of the story and I could see this turning into a decent story with some good editing. Namely the punctuation and the grammar. There is a lot of things I caught just reading though it, I would go through and read it aloud to yourself tk help catch writing mistakes and issues with the flow of the story. Other than that? I would add more detail. For example, the ruins that were found in the begining. Its a small thing, but it proves my point. You mentioned how the ruins were a big deal and how everyone was excited, but you didnt really show that with the characters which makes them seem very 2d. Not only that but as a reader I’m left with questions, like what do the ruins look like? Is it in the desert? Where are the ruins located? I am not saying you need to do a info dump by any means, but adding bits of information to help paint the picture of the story you are telling. Overall I liked what I read so far, I would just really go through and add more detail. World building is one of the most important things you can do for your book. Keep up the good work!