Among the fundamentals of writing are form and substance, with form being the way the plot is expressed, meaning the use and mastery of, in this case, the English language, and substance being the sum of plot, setting and character development. These are a small but key fraction of the fundamentals of writing, but a story without the latter is unreadable. The former can be tolerated - everybody makes mistakes every once in a while, though to write a story you need a certain amount of proficiency with the language, which the author seems to lack. If the author ever happens to read this, please take my advice to heart: master the language, preferably to c1-c2 level and use programs like grammarly that help you fix your mistakes in the meantime; read some books and analyse the structure of their stories - how do they progress? How are the events linked together? Are they linear or do they branch out? Have an idea of what you want to write before you do, and plan at least a general outline of the world and its rules and factions. Example: in Star Wars, the Force has always had very specific uses and costs - manipulating objects up to a reasonable mass, lightning and precognition being the main things, and everything tired you out and needed training; the EU expanded on it gradually in its setting, while keeping costs and requirements in mind; the new trilogy has some kind of BS healing abilities and instant mastery of everything by the protagonist, which takes away the stakes - if you can heal people from death and suffer no consequences, than characters dieing are just another Tuesday to you, because they can be revived; if a character can insta-heal from grievous wounds, then there is no danger in them being hurt. These things break a story. If they were to take time and effort, like in the EU, they would instead be a useful and intriguing ability, instead of breaking the laws of the universe and the story itself. In your case, you somehow managed to get what is effectively a northern princess and a random unknown edgily-named Lord on a pirate ship with no consequences, without explaining how it happened. It isn't impossible, but it ALWAYS has consequences - torture, rape, murder, slavery, marooning, these are all things that happen in GoT, yet here they somehow just don't? Do the pirates not notice them? Does the 4th Hokage from Naruto just Hiraishin the two twats to the ship, has them bang and then sends them back home? How does it work? ALWAYS ask yourself "how?" and "why?". Also, the dad dies delivering some random message. Off-screen. Why does Edge-lord deliver some unknown message to the king and die? We do not know enough about him to care (he materialised on a pirate ship, banged oc's mom, then f'ed off and died) and we do not know what he delivered and why. There's so many holes in the first half of the first chapter, I could be here for hours. Just learn how to write before publishing, maybe get someone to read your stuff and fix the mistakes or give you a second opinion. Hope you take this under consideration.
P.S. I've seen a couple reviews and all they say is effectively "great story bruv, keep it up!". Do they not notice these things or not care? If you notice things being wrong, even if you love the story, at least tell the author what mistakes or plot holes there are, so that they may improve.
P. P. S. Also, sorry if I've ranted so much, I got triggered by some things, but I do hope you improve 😊😅 GL!