It's the author here, shamelessly (read pitifully) giving myself a 5star. This one will be a multi-verse travel fanfic, starting off with small power level worlds and moving onto bigger ones like one piece and DC. I'm going to try and keep this one going building the character up more slowly, but in the beginning it does pick up a bit to give the MC a base. This is a self insert fic, were I'm trying to show what I would do, that's probably why most of my MC's all have the same personality. There won't be any pairing as of right now as I have one planned for a later world, and it will never be a harem fic, sorry to those how like that.
This story must be written by an intelligent child who is completely obsessed with sharks. The main character undergoes ritual to turn his teeth into shark's teeth, becomes an animagus with the rm of a shark, and even talk to sharks. The main character is totally "Mary Sue" with endless resources, and the ability to learn anything he wants almost instantly, but no personality.
la historia en si no es mala pero tiene muchos problemas 1. el MC(autor) tiene una afición por los tiburones, lo que no esta mal pero el MC hace cosas sin sentido respecto a ello 2. la historia tiene muchos vacíos sin sentido: ej: el Mc sale del orfanato como si nada(como dejan salir a un niño de 5 años de un orfanato), el mc puede usar magia libremente teniendo 5 años(sin descubrir su magia, practicarla) solo de la nada ya puede y tiene buen control, total sin sentido. después de los vacíos y las estupideces que hace por los tiburones, la historia no están mala pero es quizás un poco pobre... bueno esta critica esta un poco dura, pero bueno si ignoras eso la historia no esta tan mal
Another fanfiction illegally making money off of copyrighted works like Attack On Titan, Jeepers Creepers, Harry Potter etc while not even being a good fanfiction. The protagonist is a violent sociopath that beats people half dead and permanently disfigures them for the smallest slight. At one point, he went into Ollivander's wand shop knowing he'd try to scare him by appearing suddenly(a harmless prank) and punched him. He hit him so hard his jaw broke and then waited until he woke up to use his wand to painfully, permanently disfigure him so he would have a lisp the rest of his life. Also, the writing itself is bad with him skipping over many important details such as how he uses the sword of Gryffindor to destroy a horcrux without ever putting basilisk venom on it or how Goblins all had wands. It's inconsistent! The protagonist also does dumb things like how he got his left arm cut off by Jeepers Creepers and lets the thing have it. He never regrows his arm even though he can do so very easily or could have reattached the original. The Author said that it was because he wanted to replace it with something better, but thats rediculous when he could just cut off then replace the arm later while using a pain elimination potion. He also goes to some worlds such as the Adamms family universe on Titan but doesn't do what he said he would originally. An example is how he said he would study the potions of or supernatural abilities the Adamms family possesses but just leaves without doing so once Snape marries a member of the Adamms family. Another is that he went to the world of Attack on Titan right after getting the powers of the armored titan and the collossus titan but leaves right afterwards without collecting the other powers because he's a coward that is afraid of being eaten by Titans when he's in a flying castle. That doesn't include that he has spells of instant dearh like the Avada Kedavra or the fact that he has the three Hallows that would let he himself stay hidden as long as he wished plus his castle being much the same. Most importantly, the book is also clearly not edited at all but he still has locked over a hundred chapters(Over 50% of the book) behind a paywall. This is illegal as he doesn't own the copyrights to many of the worlds in his fanfiction or right to the IPs such as Harry Potter, AoT, etc. The grammar, spelling and punctuation are at the level of a 6th grader. 1/5 Stars, do not read. Especially don't pay to read the rest on his patreon when he is clearly lackidasical in his efforts when the book he's trying to make money off of(illegally!) isn't even properly edited. And don't tell me that he'a a non-english speaker to excuse this! If he can barely write or understand the English language, he shouldn't be writing a fanfiction that he's trying to make money off of. If I pay for a product, I expect a minimum amount of effort given and that is CLEARLY not present.
love how it's going, sad about the girls breaking up with him, but I understand why since there relationship was based on protection, but they could of started the relationship anew once they left the Hp world and build a even stronger relationship cause they still loved each other I could understand the break if they didn't have any love at all but they still loved him just not as much. So the relationship should be broken up but be rebuilt and based upon love and not protection. but since it all ready come to this who'd gonna be the next girlfriend in my opinion it should be Nagina cause she's like him not just human wizard but something more and they'll be better capable of understanding each other based on what they Been though and form a powerful relationship
I'm gonna give it a shot because I do enjoy hardly potter and every writer deserves a shot in my opinion. S+ for writing for you. What I'm most interested about for your character is the look of their patronus but with it being a reincarnation into someone body in the series I just hope its someone that didn't get much book or air time
I really love this novel, i love that u made his animages a shark and slowly evolved it to a megalodon size, and love the gus personality, and love what your doing with it. also it be cool if his shark friends each become a new species of Magical sharks and if he found a few megalodons in the deep ocean, along with other prehistoric sharks and shark like creature cause that be awesome. and I can't wait for the next chapters
It's quite good. I particularly enjoyed the MC. He's a pretty chill guy, but he's also smart, and actually uses the stuff he learns. Huge fan of his personality. However... I'm not such a huge fan of his body mods. He ends up having a tattoo, shark teeth, and looks like a fifteen year old, in his first year. However... Everything else about the story is good, so give it a try. I ended up liking it more than I thought I would.