Zaelum
Honestly, this would be a fantastic novel if the author didn't rush through everything. Not enough detail and many MANY grammar mistakes and plot holes. It was a good idea... But this novel just doesn't have a good storyline if you know what I mean. Everything is predictable and the normal canon characters all don't act like they REALLY would. Though at times they would be similar the are simply too many unexplained details in the story. Like how does Rin love the MC? How is the MC going to explain how he knows all the names of the servants and who they are? Why do the others not question him? AND Really why does the author NOT go back and fix grammar mistakes? Like he even spelled author wrong... I am simply speechless...
First Review! From ME! HAHAHA, well... I think this novel, has potential as a form to accomplish ours fantasies about getting the waifus of the world of Fate. Right now I have a few chapters, and I don't know to where is heading but, well, I hope is good, hahaha. My first goal will be to learn to write well! My grammar sucks, as English is not my native language, but it will get better! Goodbye and hope you guys enjoy it.
Okay I see a add in character that has blood relation to MC and he be rad man recantation on the go. He changes some important events here... I see harem oh that some aces for this series! Also how ya gonna interact with OG MC servant... kinda be wild on that part since... na ya got the skills. Look out for the male servants they be out the picture or no comment?
I really like the power system but the the there many plot holes. No character depth. The flow feels so forced. It MC is so Ooc from his background story and thing go downhill after he gets his waifu.. Last is. Its a harem but there's limit to of people he can take to go to another dimension? So what the point of getting harem? Overal good cringe story..
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The dots ββ¦β are so overused and to me it just ruins the story since every paragraph I read has atleast 2 to 3 of just ββ¦β, and I read with an audible voice reading for me in my head so to me, thereβs just constant pausing while the characters are talking and it screws up my focus on the story or immersion into it.
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