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To be honest, the story was a total disappointment. It started off ok, nothing really special, but it was ok, the bad thing is the most pathetic and forced romance I've ever seen, and over all crepuscle cliche, the MC just comes into the world, tries his powers and bonds with the blonde girl, by force and the MC didn't even care, the bond comes and the MC says he wants to get away, he wants freedom, so he was doing his own thing for a year, then comes the problems that the blonde's family has problems and the MC feels that, blah blah, in the end the MC saves her and falls totally in love with her because of the bond, which ironically makes him a slave to love and the bond, really disappointing, mostly because it seems that no one who does crepusculo fanfic tries to do something new or different, it's all bonding, bonding, and more bonding.
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I think the author wanted to give the story some spice a plot twist to entertain the readers and failed miserably He is hostile against the cullens for petty reasons like them favoring edward another (it's nunya business why do you care?) The forced romance and bonding, bonding. And even more bonding This is a hot piece of garbage that you can read if you are bored to death
started off good. i have no problem with and OP MC. But the meeting with Rosalie felt forced and totally unrealistic. Then when then did meet it was a whimper not a bang that started thier relationship. no passion or feeling. just hey we got a bond and shes like okay well be together forever. no passion no feeling no meet cute. nothing. then you surround the most robotic couple in the world with nothing but giant A hole robots in the form of the cullens. they are all one note you rarely ever mention whose talking so. it takes a while to even realize that edward has a sister or that Emmett is even there. not only that but she isnt even freaking out when hes crippled. then you brutalized a character for seemingly small slights that make little sense and have no real outward effect on the MC i mean at that point just kill him and be done with it. my opinion this is the author wanting to rip the story of twilight apart and NOT tell his own story with twilight as the background. if you didnt like any of the characters but a few how bout just DONT do a twilight fanfic.