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Not bad. It's actually read good, but it's not great, what would make it great is if you write dialogues as they should be, like this: "Hey, what are you doing?" Person 1 asks, watching over the shoulder of Person 2 with curiosity. "I'm teaching someone how to write a dialogue." "Why?" "Well, I want them to become a better writer than they already are and most people click off if they don't see properly written dialogue." "Like you." Person 1 jokes. Person 2 stops and looks over his shoulder, and shoots person 1 a glare. Moments later Person 2 is chasing after Person 1 while cussing them out, and promising pain, while Person 1 screams for mercy. ^Thats what I except to see, alright now good day to you. ;)

This protagonist thinks like a child, and behaves like one too. His naivety is so incredible that I'm now utterly speechless. He literally bares out his weakness to his enemies, asking them questions as if he were a mere infant. Why do you do this to us author? This abomination is a mockery of Dracula in all his forms. This Dracula-inspired sham has the intelligence of Frankenstein and the personality of Luffy. By God, where's the majesty of Dracula from Dracula Untold? Where's the apathy of Dracula from Hellsing? Don't read this if you're expecting anything remotely dark. This is just the typical superhero rubbish. Dark powers slapped onto a poorly written anti-hero.

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nonsense.He was taken as a slave there. He is trying to eat little in hard or very bad jobs. But as far as I can see, he was not worked inhuman. When I look at his character, he will be a hero MC, romantic. This novel is not for those who love evil MC, reasonable, ruthless MC like me. Himself as a slave joined the military. They will use him as cannon fodder on the battlefield, not to teach him anything. After all, he consumes food every time he lives. I hated the mc mentality.

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at least don't delete the chapters man when you're dropping a fic

Why did you delete the chapters I was on chap 24

Bro.. no warning? What u drop it for? Just as it was getting good with the story you just throw it away like last nights dinner? One of my favorite stories and now it's just gone. My day is ruined. Are u fonna rewrite it or not? If not why did you have to delete the chapters? At least then you're audience could reread if they wanted to

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It’s ok. A bit of broken English, weird sentence structures, and dialogue. Everything kinda comes off as if it was written by a child, or someone who has no idea what they’re talking about, and are just repeating what they heard. MC gives off MAJOR white knight energy, so that’s a turn off. I hope it doesn’t continue. I’m interested in the premise however, so I’ll continue to read.

seriously this story was incredible, it's such a shame it was dropped. I understand how hard it is to keep going when you lack inspiration, but still, I feel like I just got dumped😭

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One of my favorite vampire story😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭Well thanks for trying.

I can understand dropping due to a lack of inspiration but why deleted and it's entirety you could leave it up there and it could act as a form of inspiration for somebody else

It would have been great work if not for the writing style. .......................... .......................... ..........................

o..... I made a mistake. I thought that a man from earth was reborn with the powers. For a moment I thought that he would regain his memories later but this is just Dracula/Alucard with extra steps. The story is really good, the grammar is perfect ... but it's not what I hoped for..

nicely done don't drop ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------

Really well done mate, interesting storyline and great pacing please keep it up and am looking forward to more from you and this story ——————-

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