I like the intro. Improve your characters, enhance the settings to make it more vivid and use well chosen words to create a spark to the imagination of your readers. Don't forget the strong plot twists. Goodluck!
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I have a lot of fun reading this but there are some boring scenes. This was just the beginning of your journey as a writer so I understood. Keep on writing even you have limited audiences. I'm sure you will improve someday.
You got something on this piece. Continue practicing and read other detective books so that you will have a wider perspective in writing stuffs like this. Don't worry, you'll be fine through experiences.
As I read your story it reminds me of my writing journey. I started also from writing detective stories. This book is great I have a lot of fun reading your story. Goodluck!