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Overall a really good Story. I like the world building, the setting is good and the characters are likeable. The only thing that I really don't like is the love Triangle part that was mentioned in the Synopsis and has already started.(I am at chapter 70). Coupled with the fact that the locked chapters start from here I have decided to not continue reading. Keep it up author, your Story is awesomeπ. I just don't like love Triangle and have not enough fast passes.π
Interesting background of a 12 year old girl from magic world pushed into a VR game like SAO. First, the positives: it's a decent story with some semblence of plot and characterisation. Grammar and spelling (in english) is 99% good, with only a few mistakes. I've seen worse on this site. Now, the problems: The setup is a bit broken as some things don't make sense. She praises her father as a great diplomat and general, yet he's the one who sold her off to a foreign prince and imprisoned her when she tried to escape the prince. She's supposedly a genius general (at 12!) who's left armies to victories. When did she start? at 9 years age?!?! For a genius, she's pretty dumb too, and some situations have to be patiently explained to her as she can't seem to grasp the underlying principles. The supporting characters are about the same, decent but with a few silly problems. A romance subplot is clumsily shoved into the story. It's creepy reading about this 12 year old girl thinking lustful thoughts about a male player. She is written more as a 16 year old than 12 year old, and there doesn't seem to be any particular reasons why she's 12 and not 16. The conflict between the 2 supporting males is very clumsy and forced. No one in their right mind would have any hesitation in picking one over the other, but this supposed genius is torn over which one to trust. Overall it's not bad, but only because there are far worse ones out there. It's really not worth reading though, as the large plotholes eventually break down the suspension of disbelief and I just said "That's it, this is too ridiculous, I give up." Read at your own peril.
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The story summary was very interesting and it got me hooked up. Its a story where FL is not weak and just accepts her bad fate, instead fights back. Dialogue delivery is good and author did a very good job in descriptive part, making it easy for readers like me to understand well. Story development is also well in pace, not too fast nor not too slow. Character designing is also good. And when coming to writing quality and grammar errors, I really have no complaints, coz I too don't know much about such stuff. All in all author did a great job and keep up the good work dear author. I definitely continue reading this book and are added it In my library I will definitely give 5/5 for the authors hardwork and to encourage him to deliver more such good works. I'm cheering for you author.
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