I'd probably give my own story here 3.7-4-ish stars, writing quality has a few past/present tense mistakes, some writing errors and confusing sentences, and overly repeated words, but is mostly clear and 'enjoyable' to read. I think I did an okay job on the action, but I don't have enough experience with that to tell.
There will only be one chapter for this. So obviously 5-stars.
I only gave myself 3 stars for story development, as it's too short a story to really test any natural/interesting developments, developed as expected, maybe did an above-average job explaining things.
I personally found the characters fun, and was somehow able to give them slightly different personalities in such a short story, nothing too multilayered. Can't really brag, but I think I made some fun, fairly well-written characters.
I had lots of details fleshed out for the plot, world, city names, history, blah blah that didn't really fit in. Given how short the story is, I'm not going to be too harsh on myself over not being super detailed. Though I will say I should've described the fauna/landscape of the area and at least attempted to depict the alien world outside of a single building.
Thanks for reading my review of my own story, now take off your pants and I'll give you a cookie.
