Second Eye
"… was caved downwards…" --> "… [dipped/was sloped/…] downwards…" (? caved would indicated that it collapsed at one point) "… Iron Sand Citys" --> "… Iron Sand Cities." "Heyy!" --> "Hey!" "There was no question that the thunderous might of Iron Sand City had greatly frightened them." --> "There was no question that the thunderous might that was shown in Iron Sand City had greatly frightened them." "… collapsed amid the explosions…" --> "… collapsed amidst the explosions…" "I am." --> (? this statement seems a bit out of place, since it doesn't match the inquiry <May Osha's chief step forth.> I'm not sure what's best here, but it might be a declaration of presence, like "I am here.")