Comments of chapter undefined of Echoes of Arrakis: House Veridian

I got excited seeing the title and am posting as a comment rather than a review because I feel the entire thing is still in a planning stage. I think there's potential in the setting if it's developed more but right now everything feels like an outline of what was planned to be quite a few chapters rather than what was posted. The fact that he was watched and things were happening in the background could be left to be discovered later by both the character and the reader to make it more interesting. The character's situation is unclear at all, how is he aware it's Arrakis initially. Was he dropped in naked, clothed, stillsuited, did he get a krysknife, how does he deal with the wildlife? His own initial exploration of his situation and survival would be critical to developing a good story because it sets up an initial personality, how smart he is, what concerns he has, how he can plan. I'm really curious how he makes it to Arrakeen, there are other cities and some smaller off-worlder settlements.

Good chapter. Enjoyed the progression