Comments of chapter undefined of Unwanted Warrior Luna

It has an interesting storyline . The only error I can spot here is that the author used the simple present tense to narrate the story, which is not suitable for the first person narrative technique. The use of past tense is more suitable for this narrative technique. When describing the characters' reactions to something, the use of simple present tense is not very suitable. I hope the author can work on this to make this novel perfect. Looking forward to more interesting chapters.💚