Comments of chapter undefined of Not An Ordinary Reincarnation

See this! I just gifted the story: Ice cola

Um 3rd almost word for word repeat and this one I had to pay for. When I have to pay for a repeat I stop paying. Especially when I haven’t yet been able to connect to the main character enough to really want to know what’s next. Good start to the story with setting up the world, but mc is a bit flat.i realize you are trying to show him developing but you need to get the reader connected with him before the paywall starts, and a triple repeat just as the paywall starts forced a disconnect with me. Read once that you have a paragraph to a page to get the reader started on a book and you managed that well, but to keep them the story has to build the world while not losing the reader’s connection to the main char. And frankly this fell into a naritive travel guide. The battle with the snake had no energy to it,the cute side char of the woodpecker never built to anything disappearing without a trace, the connection of the core to the crystal body and what each means to the dungeon are a mystery I suppose that the reader is supposed to figure out but really just onc more disconnects from the story. I liked the story enough to give this comment but not enough to keep going. So here’s the questions I had. 1. Was the dungeon core transferred to the crystal body or is it now being destroyed as the awareness is wandering while it lies unprotected. 2. How does the first dungeon resident deal with the crystal body being the new dungeon. And did it see it created? Or is it the crystal body since otherwise how did the dungeon connect to the crystal pool that’s who knows how far from the core and otherwise outside the dungeon bounds. 3 what does the crystal body look like? In eight chapters the best description of the dungeon and the body are it’s made of crystal and the dungeon has a triangular shadow. That’s it. The body came from a pool which would allow at least a moment of self reflection to look at what he now looks like, plus the first resident has eyes and yet on looking through those eyes there was no description of the dungeon nor the crystal body. Sorry a wandering crystal of indeterminate shape, color, probably at least translucent or opaque since it can cast a shadow instead of a rainbow with a personality reset to exist in the moment with no introspection or thoughts except find the artifact to destroy the shadow….. doesn’t develope the character enough to hold my interest.