emir_adar
The conversations are monotonous it's like robots speaking without any feelings. And you should change the way of writing dialogues as these kinds of dialogues are not very friendly in novels. And the other thing you can do is describe everything from third person perspective for the better understanding of the readers. Because I don't see much of devlopment in these things and all I see is MC doing his own thing and those monotonous dialogues. This thing if not taken earlier will make you lose your current audience as they will get bored of these .