Comments of chapter undefined of Reincarnation in DxD with wishes
Reincarnation in DxD with wishes
emir_adar
Chapter comments10
I've read the last few chapters, and I think you are doing well, maybe shift around with how you structure sentences, like "Finally I did this---" Into something akin to..: And when I finally reached this point, I did this---" Which will make it seem more descriptive and less stiff. Perhaps extend the chapters and leave some explanations in a small A/N at the bottom part of the chapter.
there is not enough description of everything (especially descriptions of “people” and the environment). for people who haven't watched the anime or read the manga, it will be very difficult, they won't be able to imagine the characters without descriptions... there were only names (people don't know what his parents look like, you didn't describe their appearance, just named names ). It would also be a good idea to describe the location in which it is located. Brief descriptions of new places will also be useful. the rest is still interesting (there is potential).
