Comments of chapter undefined of Dear Author: Please Change The End
Dear Author: Please Change The End
HarrY
Chapter comments7
RadpiplupLv12Radpiplup
to be completly honest the fight scene was mediocre, and not telling us about his powers before hand really ruined the fight. If you went ahead and explained his powers and even mentioned htem in the fight before it happened this would've been way better. You also mentioned the grace family ability without saying what it is. You should include what that is next time you make a similiar chapter.
RadpiplupLv12Radpiplup
I think jus explaining his strenghts or having like a system stats bar show in the chapter before the fight or when he awkaned would've been better. more information of what his families power is would seem to me like a good choice but you did a good job on the chapter!
HarrY:thanks for the feeback, if you want to explain more in detail about the way I wrote the battle you can tell me, in regards of his power, is that his power is not something really worth to explain, he can simply switch things, and I thought that not explaning beforehand would be better in this specific situation so that the reader could feel surprise in the same way did his opponent, now about the Grace family abilities will be something that I'll explain later, but is something long that it shouldn't be in this type of chapter, that's what I think, but feel free to disagree, I want to hear your opnion
