Comments of chapter undefined of Shadow Slave FF | A Slave Once Again
Shadow Slave FF | A Slave Once Again
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It's an interesting story, but I think you're a bit rushed. Sunny doesn't need to be so careless yet and release information and act in such suspicious ways. I understand that you don't want him to hide the time travel for a long time from the team, but this is too fast. Just as Neph's love for Sunny is already so strong at this point in the story? It's overkill. It's undeniable that she's liked him since that time, but not the passion that her pov showed a few chapters ago. That could have been something to develop with the time they spend together since Sunny returned and made different decisions. That's what I mean when I say that I think you're a bit rushed. That said, I'm enjoying the story, and I hope you keep writing
Glad that you’re enjoying the story and I do agree with you, your opinion sure is appreciated. but again, We never have an actual POV of her in the actual novel so I got creative out of my own, while still trying to keep some characteristics of her. The original route I wanted to take for the fic was the one-shot route for the sake of their relationship so some of the ideas might have remained, and it might even sound forced. I actually thought multiple times about toning down the pace a bit so you might see some changes too, however thanks for your opinion, it will surely be taken into consideration. And I apologize for any shortcomings.
