Comments of chapter undefined of hermanos parker

1. The many bracketed thoughts were unnecessary. You could do the Author's Notes after the entire chapter. 2. I don't know if it's because I translated it but the chapter is too jam packed 3. Also yes, the powers are too much. The best formula for a Fanfiction is to 1. Have an idea of how you want the story to end 2. Pick one superpower... Overpowered or not... It should be impactful meaning it should be powerful but flexible. Meaning you can use it for all you want without anyone complaining at some point