Comments of chapter undefined of The Forger

LemonChusle:I've been thoroughly enjoying your work, and I can't help but feel compelled to share a few thoughts on the protagonist's character development. It seems like he lacks a clear goal in life and simply goes with the flow. As a blacksmith, he could establish a goal such as becoming the greatest blacksmith or even exploring the warrior's path. It appears that he's not interested in the latter, but giving him a distinct objective could add depth to his character. Additionally, the protagonist seems to underutilize his opportunities to explore magic. For instance, while staying with the Nobel, he could delve into magical knowledge from the knights or other sources. Creating a sense of curiosity and ambition in this regard would enrich the narrative. I also suggest introducing an element of caution and strategic thinking in the protagonist. Rather than exposing all his capabilities, he could keep some cards hidden up his sleeve, creating an air of mystery around him. Concerns about the Nobel potentially exploiting him or treating him like a 'slave' could add tension and intrigue to the story. Moreover, it would be interesting to see the protagonist contemplating the strength of knights in comparison to ordinary people. Questions about their training, diet, and whether their power is solely derived from mana or other factors like specific breathing techniques could add depth to the world-building. Considering the protagonist has just returned from a bloody war, witnessing the horrors of battle, it might be fitting for him to exhibit a tougher demeanor. While he shouldn't become entirely desensitized, a more resilient and mature outlook would align better with his recent experiences. These are just a few suggestions to enhance the protagonist's character and the overall narrative. I appreciate your dedication to your craft and look forward to seeing how the story evolves.