HaozDancer
not bad so Far but unlike the comment below me i do not mind the lack of the characters own perspective I'm just here for the story, not bad...not bad at all....;)
I hate reading prologues. And the whole thing here was definitely one, as if forcefully shoving the story in my face instead of actually 'telling' it to me. And I recognize the key problem is how the protagonist reacted so late, Its more like he is a doll and not a living person, and only in the very end he says some stuff as if you got forced to write his reaction.