Comments of chapter undefined of Terra Nova Online : Rise Of The Strongest Player

The moment I saw the compliment I felt something sad was coming...Elena.

Elena!!😭😭

Good chapter

I am reviewing each chapter of this story until I get my event bonus all-works-fp for reading for five minutes (it's been 30). I can appreciate that the author finally decided to actually describe things. That table is neat. I can believe that Windows still takes forever to boot 118 years in the future on ten-year-old hardware. That's even funny. The dialogue is trash though. Clicking through an application is not "in a desperate move." That kind of phrase belongs in a fight scene. They have been committed to this since the previous chapter. Elena's question to her sons about how to apply goes unanswered and everyone just acts like she never asked it, including Elena. Every sentence of dialogue gets a preamble that is longer than the sentence itself. It's clunky and hard to follow. Perhaps this is just a little awkward phase and things will get good when the author hits their stride. It can't all be like this.

thank for this chapter

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Thanks for the chapter

good chapter

Oh no