Comments of chapter undefined of Fate/ Ancient Greece

Start of book, i mean his reincarnation is a bit trite, but nonthenless so far so good, i think. And deffinitely good for someone who just started, as i believe you claimed it's your first time writing something. I hope it won't be harem. You're on good way to make decent book, and i can tell that by just two chapters. Don't ruin it.