Comments of chapter undefined of I Reincarnated in Martial Peak

DaoistdqLrS6:Well, I read the chapters twice. You have some improvement. Your problem is dealing with girls’ feelings. It is impossible to have a good relationship between them to this degree. Also, the hero is strong, handsome, and talented, but you are not good at setting up a dangerous situation that is proportional to the cheating. The limits that I gave to the hero as advice, try a lot of descriptions while deliberately creating loopholes to exploit them. Later in fights, for example, let's say that you give the hero an ability that allows him to become stronger with every punch he takes, but if he stops punching, the force of the punch returns to the original. So during the fight between the hero and the enemy, a weak third party appears, but he stops the hero's series of punches, leading to knowledge. The enemy has a weak point, so he avoids punches sometimes, which leads to a more enjoyable fight. This is just an example, so he deliberately places weak points and also takes advantage of your mistakes. For example, Fang Wan, the main character in the novel Reverend Insanity, was suffering from a problem, which was his bad temper, but he always miraculously survives, and this is clearly a mistake in the writing. But the author of the work made a genius move by making this misfortune a part of Heaven's Will's plan to manipulate fate so that Fang Wan was just a pawn to stop Venerable Spectral Spirit, who was considered the greatest toast in the story. Do something similar. Close your mistakes in writing by making them hints of future things, making them toasts instead. If you make mistakes and thus exploit your mistakes, I advise you to write drafts that list all the plots and situations that you want to happen and try to match them with the original story. For example, do not get rid of Ling Kai, but rather make him the main enemy and the annoying friend who is my enemy, and make him get the lotus that warms the soul, and the hero, give him something equal in value to be The story is more enjoyable, the main character and her relationship with the son of fate. They are enemies but have respect for each other. The Great Space Emperor vs. The Great Copy Emperor, who will win? This will be fun The important thing is that your story is good. Just keep trying to improve. It is not an original story. In the end, try and fail and succeed. This is how the world is. I will read this until the end, so keep going. And if you need ideas about the abilities, plots, characters, I am there, and the comments are there. An idea from me and from you and from the comments. You will write a very respectable story, and I am sorry for that. Any errors or incomprehensible words, Google Translate. Thank you for the chapter 🙂 والسلام عليكم ورحمة الله وبركاته